Agree/ Disagree: The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
As technology evolves, people are more informed about the lifestyle of celebrities and famous figures through internet. Some people believe that celebrities have had as much impact on older people as on the youth. However, I think that the influence of these stars on younger people’s life is more significant. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, juveniles are more exposed to advertisements than older people due to their constant presence in social media applications such as instagram or facebook. Famous people have lots of followers on these social medias, and a huge percentage of these followers are young people. Through surfing the personal pages of these celebrities they encounter many advertisement that seem very attractive. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Three years ago, I was really into running. I have started reading articles to learn to become a good runner, I exercised a lot and was searching in the internet all day to learn more about running. I encountered a famous runner’s page on Instagram. He shared daily tips about diet and other necessary things for a good runner. He also advertised daily for the company, whose shoes he wore at his contests. At first I tried to ignore that advertisement, but he repeated it so many times that finally I bought that shoe, which I never used! This example clearly demonstrates the power of celebrities in social medias.
Secondly, younger people are not experienced enough and they don’t exactly know what they should do, so they are always trying to find a hero, whom they can follow. As a result, they are searching for a role model. In contrast, older people are mature enough to understand that they are the most influential person in their lives. For example, when my brother was a school student, he was enthusiastic about physics. So, he searched to find a physicist that impress him. When he found Leonard Susskind, his world changed. He saw his speeches on youtube, read his interviews and wanted to imitate what he was doing to become a remarkable physicist like Susskind. Had he not known Susskind, he wouldn’t be so motivated today about this major.
In conclusion, I do agree that the opinions of famous people have a more profound impact on youth than older people. That’s because younger people are more exposed to advertisement and because they are always in search of a hero to follow.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun advertisement seems to be countable; consider using: 'many advertisements'.
Suggestion: many advertisements
...ges of these celebrities they encounter many advertisement that seem very attractive. My own exper...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, thus, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95662650602 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75806685768 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53734939759 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2427739628 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7083333333 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2916666667 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.04166666667 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253426387845 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735265267114 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796667371177 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195759878021 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0831274916416 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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