Agree Disagree People should not spend too much money on personal enjoyment

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Agree/Disagree
People should not spend too much money on personal enjoyment.

Money is indispensable part of our life, and possessing them /it/ makes it possible for us to acquire goods and services necessary for our daily lives. The question remains how money must be spent. Personally, I believe that we have to spend money we earn on things that are vital for us rather than spending them on personal enjoyment. I hold this opinion for several reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, all of us have /has/ families and people for whom we are responsible. This responsibility among other things requires from us material support. Consequently, if we are thinking only about our personal enjoyment we will not be able to help people we need our assistance. My own experience is a compelling example of this. My family members, namely my children need my financial support to grow up, to get education and so on. This requires from me to be financially disciplined in order to be able to help them. Thus, our responsibilities make us less attentive to our personal enjoyments, and more attentive to other things we should do.
Secondly, spending too much on personal enjoyment will leave us unable to save money. Life is unpredictable; we may encounter situations in which we will need to spend more than we are used to. So, if we spend all we earn and don't make savings we will have difficulties some day. For instance, my uncle was a successful businessman who was earning a lot of money and spending them without regard to the long-term interests. In the financial crisis of 2008 he went bankrupt, and because he had no savings that period was very hard for him. That is why we all have to try to save money for hard days.
To sum up briefly, we all have to spend money we earn wisely. Its explanation is twofold: first, above all, we have to take care of people who depend on us; secondly, we should save money in order to be prepared for unexpected situations that may occur in our lives.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 226, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...sed to. So, if we spend all we earn and dont make savings we will have difficulties ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
briefly, consequently, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, for instance, first of all, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61671469741 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73924727869 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518731988473 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9902324582 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.3157894737 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2631578947 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159793896816 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601085340204 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0808995020158 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110758150441 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0460731668934 0.0645574589148 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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