agree or disagree
successful people need to take risk rather than do what they use to do
Everyone has their own goals and they work hard to fulfill them. In spite of their hard work success or failure is still unpredictable. Some people are comfortable in doing things which he or she are used to do regularly while others like to do challenging things. In my opinion successful people are always a step ahead to take risks. A few hurdles won’t resist them from taking bold decisions. There are a couple of reasons supporting my opinion which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, popular people are brave enough to take tough decisions. One can take risk only if they are aware of consequences they have to face if something went wrong and well-educated people are willing to take that risk. The famous scientist Roentgen who invented x-rays is a good example of what I mean. Before he invented no one knows anything about x-rays. He knew that x-rays can be an advanced aid to medical technology. He knew that by discovering x-rays we can able to diagnose many medical ailments in the initial period. Even though, there are few side effects due to exposure to radiation they didn’t stopped him. He proceeded further and because of his incredible efforts he was able to discover x-rays. If he is scared of negative effects, he may not be able to accomplish his goal and today we are unreachable to x-rays. Someone has to come forward to expose unpredictable events if he or she thinks it’s useful to mankind. Those people are real life heroes, the successful people.
Secondly, even common man must have some courage to take a new path which is different from his routine. For example, if an young boy wants to enter new field which is completely out of his way, he should be mentally strong enough to take that step. My cousin Jhon is a good example for this kind of situation. He was from farmers back ground. once he finished his graduation he wanted to join stock market. He didn’t have any relatives or friends from this field to help him. In the beginning his family opposed his opinion but his desire was so strong and he joined stock market against their will. Initial period, he struggled but finally he became a successful business person. Everyone was praising him for what he achieved.
In conclusion, I totally agree with the statement that successful people are always ready to face challenges because we can achieve something, which is useful to man kind only if we are ready to take risk. Moreover everyday life is a challenge, we should be strong enough to take tough decisions if we want to fulfill our dreams.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 197, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...ortable in doing things which he or she are used to do regularly while others like ...
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Line 2, column 201, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to doing'.
Suggestion: used to doing
...ble in doing things which he or she are used to do regularly while others like to do chall...
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Line 3, column 311, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Before” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...-rays is a good example of what I mean. Before he invented no one knows anything about...
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Line 4, column 49, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., even common man must have some courage to take a new path which is different fr...
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Line 4, column 122, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...erent from his routine. For example, if an young boy wants to enter new field whic...
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Line 4, column 345, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Once
...ation. He was from farmers back ground. once he finished his graduation he wanted to...
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Line 4, column 345, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ation. He was from farmers back ground. once he finished his graduation he wanted to...
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Line 5, column 207, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...kind only if we are ready to take risk. Moreover everyday life is a challenge, we should...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, as to, for example, i mean, in conclusion, kind of, in my opinion, in spite of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80044345898 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57713201672 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529933481153 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9376715784 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.3214285714 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1071428571 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171512345973 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440292115773 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672879313414 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117917104327 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635060723069 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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