Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Financial supports to many activities is crucial to many countrie's government specially in the vast economics crisis that the world pass through.Goverment should act wisdely in how to spend money in several acivities that in turn can be beneficial in some way to their countires. However the question is, is the govermnets should spend money on arts rather than sports? some people believe arts are much valiable than sports because its the mirror image for nation development. Ipersonaly believe the sports are more important to spent money on than art for many reasons.

To begin with, the athletics represent their countries in international Olympics which in turn, their country will be well known with in the society. This in result, many other countries will be interested in get their Olympic team to be trained in this country. Brazil is a good example of this. Brazil has the one of the most international good trained team that each Olympic games try to take the first <msreadoutspan class="msreadout-line-highlight">position</msreadoutspan><msreadoutspan class="msreadout-line-highlight"> in soccer and </msreadoutspan><msreadoutspan class="msreadout-line-highlight"><msreadoutspan class="msreadout-word-highlight">accordingly</msreadoutspan></msreadoutspan><msreadoutspan class="msreadout-line-highlight"> because their government spend a lot of money on their</msreadoutspan> athletics , the financial benefit get in turn to it as many other country try their best to train their teams by Brazilian couch and on Brazil land in turn, increase in country income from tourists, other country teams, and as an advertisement for them about their support to activities.

What's more, healthy value now a days paly a tremendous in many society. So, when government spend more money to sports it will give an encouragement to their citizens to value their health also. My experience is a good example of it. when I was in Iraq , my back home, people never value their health as government never be a pacemaker for such issue as support sports and we can find most people overweight and many are obese so, I ate a lot and get over weight . But in USA where I live the sports are very important for people because of their government support and encouraging to it , we can be a good follower to USA government in this.

In sum, although some people believe art is important to be supported financially I feel sport is much important because of international value by other nations and healthy dilemma as well.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, so, well, i feel, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2183.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.68489583333 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 7.86606171675 2.67179642975 294% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4765625 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 199.024572885 48.9658058833 406% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 155.928571429 100.406767564 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4285714286 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07142857143 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165784247966 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743312302196 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380017541465 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115459720783 0.150856017488 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479385858341 0.0645574589148 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.96 10.9000537634 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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