agree or disagree
the successful people need to take risk rather than do what they use to do
Most people’s ultimate goals to achieve successfulness. Although it is not easy to us to reach this goal. But at least person can try to climb the steers whatever its steepness. Many people think that inorder to achieve successful achievement we should take the chance no matter if it is risky or not. In this essay I will provide my substantiated view that argues the successfulness need person to put a secure plane and doing things that we already know it is have successful endings.
To begin with, without secure plane in organizing the tasks definitely will lead to looseness. All well known people especially in economic fields, political, educational, and researchers put their plan a head before any job they want to do. This proved that they never take risk to take blindly any risk new tasks because they may affect their future and carrier. For instance, today market is not stable and we found many changes take place every day for company prices in the stock exchange. One of famous company in my back home country named, Continent, try to open new department that sale women clothes beside it is normal business which sale only shoes. This company make this sudden decision because of near religious celebration day in my country. YThe people are not use to buy clothes from this company ; therefore, the sale market get worset day after day until the company loss this business. The owner should think deeply before making aunplaned decision which lead to effect his business economicaly.
In adition, successful people when he do the same what he used to do before. He will guaranty that this tasks will be successful. He understand and know the risks, requirments, and time need to be done. Rather than doing new and risky one. For example, students that study same materials everyday will earn successful marks in their study easily. When teacher set new tasks to them and just go to take test in this material they will not achieve their goal because they not use to do it as they learn to do.
In conclusion, although some people think it is important to take chance immediately no matter what is the result of it and this will lead to successful person. I personaly believe the person need to pyta good plane and knowlegment of things that we already know it will lead us to reach our ultimate goal successfully.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, therefore, well, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79259259259 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56965026368 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525925925926 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2045181143 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4285714286 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7619047619 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 5.5376344086 289% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303607883161 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856115855703 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0995102348507 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18217004864 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0934259275876 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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