Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them did you agree or disagree with this statement.
Children today are become from worse to worst more addict to video games. Games almost take all their time and control their lives negatively. The question is, should we stop them from playing? I personally believe it’s a must for several reasons that I will explore in the following essay.
As much as children play games, as more they lost their valuable morality. Our society is built on virtual value that we teach our children to follow. Any nation developments measured by their citizen behavior and these games contain an immense of bad words and since, our children consider the characters in these games as their model they copy them. My son experience is a good example for this, he was a very polite person by the certificate of all our family members and friends and once he start play these games he use many bad words as its normal for him and never though it’s not good to say it besides he also do some signs by using his middle finger without even has any idea about what mean. I explain to him its bad meanings and also keep not believe in me and all what he feels that it’s a good things since it’s allowed to be in a video games. I really feel disappointed about the bad impression he gets from these games.
Moreover, these games are a waste for time and money. My husband, once, buy a video games from internet to my son and all the information of credit card saved to the website of the game . Two days after my husband relay that our son use to buy more new version for the same games which cost us 200$ besides these waste is the time that our children spend on playing these games instead of doing something useful for their future like read a book, learn how to cook, or even do some chores to learn sharing responsibilities.
In conclusion, although some people let their children play games as entertainment. I personally believe it’s not a good idea from the message it carry that effects our children virtual value and waste the valuable time and effect the finance of the family. I recommend that parents should not allow their children to play these games and instead, they can do some enjoyable activities or watch under control some TV programs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 496, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'starts'.
Suggestion: starts
... family members and friends and once he start play these games he use many bad words ...
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Line 4, column 522, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
...s and once he start play these games he use many bad words as its normal for him an...
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Line 4, column 625, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...os;s not good to say it besides he also do some signs by using his middle finger w...
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Line 4, column 819, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'thing'?
Suggestion: thing
...all what he feels that it's a good things since it's allowed to be in a vide...
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Line 5, column 65, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a waste for time and money. My husband, once, buy a video games from internet to...
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Line 5, column 186, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...it card saved to the website of the game . Two days after my husband relay that ou...
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Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...ays after my husband relay that our son use to buy more new version for the same ga...
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Line 5, column 295, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$200'.
Suggestion: $200
...ersion for the same games which cost us 200$ besides these waste is the time that ou...
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Line 5, column 499, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to share'.
Suggestion: to share
...o cook, or even do some chores to learn sharing responsibilities. In conclusion, altho...
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Line 6, column 151, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'carries'?
Suggestion: carries
...s;s not a good idea from the message it carry that effects our children virtual value...
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Line 6, column 274, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t the finance of the family. I recommend that parents should not allow their chil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, moreover, really, so, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60506329114 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38652663652 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516455696203 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 91.2573413143 48.9658058833 186% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.6875 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6875 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.375 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219385829103 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859968723679 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0578999970426 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154456225538 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.038205206057 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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