Are government doing well in educating people to pay attention to the importance of the food nutrition and healthy eating?
The issue of whether the government do their duty well in educating people about the importance of food nutrition and healthy eating or not aroused much controversy among people of different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people, if were asked would agree with the statement that government could do their job in this field in the best way, while others have a negative attitude toward this point of view. As far as I am concerned, I am in agreement with the latter group. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on the arguments to support my view.
The first vital point to be mentioned is that the escalating rate of many problems that relate to healthy eating on an unprecedented scale proves that the government measures were not sufficient. If they accomplish their task appropriately, we should witness the effect of their measures in our society. For instance, according to scientific data, in recent years, the number of people who suffer from obesity increase significantly that linked to overeating. Moreover, the high rate of diagnosis the chronic diseases that related to the lack of proper nutritional status such as cardiovascular diseases, diabetes, blood pressure confirm people have not a healthy diet. As a consequence, this evidence proves that people awareness is not raised about a healthy lifestyle, in spite of the government might claim they do their job well.
In approaching this issue, apart from the reason given above, another reason that deserves some words is that the existence of many external things that determine whether people eat healthily or not are another compelling reason for my viewpoint. Take my hometown as an example to illustrate this. In contrast the past, the number of fast-food restaurants enhances dramatically which encourages more people to eat junk food. As you know, junk food due to the high content of fat and nitrate are really harmful to people health. While the government could control it by imposing the tax if they care to this subject.
By the way of conclusion, based on the arguments that explored above, I am of the opinion that government does not perform their task to make people aware of about healthy food, as many diseases that correlated to improper diet increase. In addition, the number of restaurants that serve fast-food escalates in recent years that attract people to unhealthy food.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, really, so, well, while, apart from, for instance, in addition, in contrast, such as, you know, by the way, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08375634518 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78657664618 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.535532994924 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9220465081 48.9658058833 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.1875 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.625 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 5.45110844103 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342823203077 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985312377521 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109255512536 0.0737576698707 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202904789922 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496648827109 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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