Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Without any doubt, traveling makes people refresh their mind after a long time of working or studying and prepare them to start their work or study with more energy and enthusiastic. The issue of whether people advantage from traveling in their own country or traveling to a foreign country aroused much controversy among people with different ages and different perspective. As I am concerned, I believe that traveling abroad benefit people more. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on arguments to support my view.
The first reason to be mentioned is that traveling abroad give us to chance to be familiar with other culture that would be a new and joyful experience. In the world, there is a lot of country with different languages and cultures that you could not see like them in your country. Every nation has different customs, religions, believes that would be so fascinating and influence our viewpoint about many of them. In fact, by traveling to a strange country, you can touch from near what you have read or watched in your media and then judge them according to your experiences. For example, many of people around the world have a negative opinion about Iran because media made a terrible picture from my country, while when tourists come to my country, many of them realize that Iranian people are very kind and this country has a great culture.
In approaching this issue, apart from the point I mentioned above, another reason that deserves some words is that you can make a new friend and it gives you an opportunity to visit that country again because you have a friend there that can give you free accommodation. Furthermore, your friend can guide you to learn more about his country. For example, the first time I visited Italy, I introduced to some nice people that they are my best friend know. They invite me several times to Italy and in contrast my first trip that I was so hectic because I do not know anyone, they help me to see a lot of historical places. Besides, they accommodate me and so I could save a lot of money.
By the way of conclusion, base on arguments explored above, I am of the opinion that we have to travel abroad to learn more about other culture that might change our opinion in many areas. Also, we can make a new friend that invites us to see this country again.
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...t invites us to see this country again.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, furthermore, if, so, then, thus, while, apart from, for example, in contrast, in fact, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1918.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64406779661 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51524556644 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493946731235 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.9907219837 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.875 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8125 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284016544318 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0922546569554 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796924564777 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170227480809 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108149275477 0.0645574589148 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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