Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
Only people who earn a lot of money are successful.
In this progressive and sophisticated world, Money plays an increasingly important role in people’s lives as it affects every facet of their life. The controversial question that arises in this regard is that whether money determines a person is successful or not. While some people are inclined towards the idea that money is a crucial factor in distinguishing successful people from unsuccessful ones, others believe against this idea. As far as I am concerned, I am of the opinion that money is not a primary factor when we want to consider someone as a successful person. In the following paragraph, I will delve into some reasons and examples justifying my point of view.
The first reason coming to my mind is that without any doubt the definition of success varies from a person to another person depending on people’s personalities, perspectives, therefore only one element such as money cannot be considered as a tool for measuring success. While for some people success means finding high-paying jobs, others find success in having a healthy family and loyal friends. Moreover, there are individuals who believe one cannot be considered as a successful person unless he/she fulfill their responsibilities as a citizen of a society in improving and developing it. In addition, depending on people’s religions, the concept of success is different. For instance, Muslims believe one who accomplishes their religious duties during the day perfectly is a successful person.
Another noteworthy reason is that happiness is an inevitable part of being successful, whereas money cannot guarantee to achieve happiness. The prominent important goal in everyone’s life is being happy which is an internal incentive that is not related to money most of the time. Not all affluent people are happy in their life. We all know some wealthy people who have a lot of problems with their spouses or their children which prevent them to be happy. Besides, suffering from incurable diseases cannot let us be happy in spite of the huge amount of money in our bank account. While there are many people with low wages who enjoy their life and happiness. Therefore, if someone with billions of dollars is not happy with his/her life, he could not consider a successful person.
To summarize, from what has been discussed above we can conclude that money cannot indicate success since the definition of success is different for people, furthermore, happiness which is an unavoidable part of the concept of success cannot gain only by money.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 507, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'fulfills'.
Suggestion: fulfills
...ed as a successful person unless he/she fulfill their responsibilities as a citizen of ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, therefore, whereas, while, for instance, in addition, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15254237288 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90953119678 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520581113801 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.3926779045 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.222222222 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9444444444 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.72222222222 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255169527811 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0867687409074 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0372183565584 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160816286458 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0086040563606 0.0645574589148 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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