Some people believe that a college or a university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views, which view do you agree with? Explain why?
The issue of whether a college university education should be available to all students or only to good students aroused much controversy among people with different ages and different perspectives. Definitely, some people if were asked would agree with the statement that higher education should be accessible to good students while others have a negative attitude. As I am concerned, I completely agree with the former group. In the following paragraph, I will shed light on the arguments to support my view.
The first point to be mentioned is that higher education includes hardship courses that need students to dedicate most of their time to study the materials that professors teach during class. As a result, only astute students who are enthusiastic about learning could pass these courses successfully. While students who were not diligent persons during their high school would not overcome this difficulty. And their grades will be disappointing. Many of them might lose their confidence since they think of themselves as useless and unsuccessful persons. While this opinion is totally wrong because they might not be gifted in the academic education, without any doubt, they are talented in a specific area, for instance, if they run a business they would be productive people in the society.
In approaching this issue, apart from the points that stated before, another reason that deserves some words is that higher education is really expensive. You have to pay a lot of money for tuition fee, accommodation. Furthermore, as a graduate or postgraduate student, you must do some researches and experiments which are costly. Not all student could afford these expenses, therefore, the family should invest their money only on their children who are good students, and otherwise, they waste their money. For example, I got my master degree in nutrition science, for my thesis I had to buy the special kit that produces only in Germany, my father spends all the costs, he knows, I really deserve it as I always was an outstanding student in my educational period.
Bay the way of conclusion, based on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion higher education should be available to capable student, since, student should learn difficult courses and if they were not good at high school, their educational condition would deteriorate in college, also the higher education is really expensive and I think only astute students are worthwhile their family pay all those expenses.
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... could pass these courses successfully. While students who were not diligent persons ...
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... costs, he knows, I really deserve it as I always was an outstanding student in m...
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...ts, he knows, I really deserve it as I always was an outstanding student in my educationa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, really, so, therefore, thus, while, apart from, for example, for instance, i think, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17777777778 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79323981977 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538271604938 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 658.8 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.2465912311 48.9658058833 188% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.0625 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3125 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8125 5.45110844103 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307506196083 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094847481681 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0872144042392 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206132569418 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0957864682138 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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