Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
Human nature is such that they are always willing to achieve full happiness. To find such a sense of satisfaction, all human attempts have been made including various inventions and advances in technology. In this regard, although some people hold that the quick changes the new world has been carrying have made people’s lives more miserable than ever before, I think that our parents and grandparents had less satisfying lives compared to us. My viewpoint is based on a few reasons, two compelling ones of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The first focal point to bear in mind is that today’s world is being a more comfortable place thanks to the genesis of many technologies that have made human lives happier and more satisfying. For example, as transportation has become ubiquitous all over the world, people can travel wherever they are willing to go. In the past, people were confined to the area where they lived or worked and had to rely on their own foot or back of horses to go long distances. Under such a circumstance, people had suffered a lot in the past due to the lack of technology, and transportation can be one of the most important cases. However, people today have access to a variety of technologies such as the Internet, lots of transportation means, heating or cooling systems, etc., which have made our lives easier. As a result, the more comfortable our lives are, the more satisfied and happier the world will be.
Furthermore, with the changes implemented on workplace standards, people today enjoy a lot of leisure time compared to people had in the past, which makes our lives more fulfilling and enables us to pursue our passions. I take longer vacations and have more paid holidays from my job than either of my parents did. Accordingly, I have a much shorter working day than they did. For instance, I receive five weeks off from my job each year. I can choose when to take those weeks, and I can even use them all at the same time. This has enabled me to pursue my love of travel. Unlike my parents and grandparents, I have been able to maintain steady professional employment and have also been able to see the entire world over the past years. My parents, in contrast, were only able to travel following their retirement. At that time, because of their age and financial status, they were not able to have the same experiences as I do now.
To put it in a nutshell, having considered all the aforementioned reasons and examples, I do believe that given the quick changes the world is experiencing, people now have happier and more satisfying lives than people had in the past. Not only has technology contributed to such a situation, but today’s working conditions also have made human lives more comfortable.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...isfied and happier the world will be Furthermore with the changes implemented on workpla...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, however, so, for example, for instance, i think, in contrast, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2229.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66317991632 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64057927679 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462343096234 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 721.8 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 478.0 20.1344086022 2374% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2229.0 100.406767564 2220% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 478.0 20.6045352989 2320% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 126.0 5.45110844103 2311% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30564106017 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.30564106017 0.076458572812 400% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.20185695138 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326410179545 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 239.5 11.7677419355 2035% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -405.23 58.1214874552 -697% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 188.5 10.1575268817 1856% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.23 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 30.52 8.01818996416 381% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 96.0 86.8835125448 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 10.002688172 550% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 193.2 10.0537634409 1922% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 10.247311828 303% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.