To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors.
In today's progressive and scientific world resulted from the emergence of technology and the industrial revolution, education and academic knowledge are the most important building blocks of any society. Therefore, it is very essential for communities not to hesitate in executing any constructive measure to improve the quality of the educational environment. In order to elevate the quality level of education, although some people believe that giving more salaries to professors can make them more incentive and energetic in teaching, I think that universities should spend more money on areas that are more significant than the salaries of university professors. My viewpoint is based on a few reasons, two compelling ones of which are elaborated upon hereunder.
The first vital area to bear in mind is that universities, in order to bolster the quality of education, should provide more funding for trial and empirical areas than theory classes taught by professors. The mental nature of human beings is in a form that can process and learn the educational materials and lessons better when they are presented in an observant and empiric state in addition to a theory way. However, when professors teach their students just in a theory manner or merely based on equations and formulas, most students only memorize them instead of learning the main concepts and meanings, which can make students close-minded and low-skilled individuals in their future lives. By funding more money in equipping laboratories and classes with advanced trial apparatuses and tools, universities provide students with a trial and empirical environment to learn better and more influential. As a result, it can make valuable opportunities for them to become more knowledgeable in their field that will be supposed to employ in the near future, which is why universities should allocate more funds to trial and empirical issues compared to other areas toward enhancing the quality of education.
Furthermore, spending more money on sport and art area can be more effective in boosting the quality of education than increasing the salaries of university teachers, in my opinion. Instead of being simply an educational and scientific place, universities should provide students with an attractive environment to drive them to attend classes with higher enthusiastic. To put it in the other words, when universities dedicate most of their budget to professors and pay little attention to entertainment and enjoyable matters, they certainly are turned into an intolerable and onerous place that diminish students’ learning efficiency. Indeed, the more tranquillity and fascinating the educational environment, the higher efficiency the learning, and more incentive the student will be to attend classes. By going to such sport and art places provided by universities, students can relieve the stress and strain imposed by stressful learning hours, which in turn can prepare them to attend the next classes with more readiness and willingness.
To put it in a nutshell, having considered all the aforementioned reasons, I do hold that spending more money on laboratory and trial areas, and funding more to entertainment and enjoyable environment like sport and art areas are more beneficial in improving the quality level of education than amplifying the salaries of professors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 879, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...rial and empirical environment to learn better and more influential. As a result, it c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, as to, i think, in addition, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2848.0 1977.66487455 144% => OK
No of words: 522.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45593869732 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77988695657 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0644036486 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465517241379 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 908.1 618.680645161 147% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 20.1344086022 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.3821199455 48.9658058833 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 189.866666667 100.406767564 189% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.8 20.6045352989 169% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.26666666667 5.45110844103 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403270254106 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140171075789 0.076458572812 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123189234562 0.0737576698707 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282282784939 0.150856017488 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0833668364598 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.7 11.7677419355 184% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.51 58.1214874552 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.1575268817 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.98 10.9000537634 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 10.002688172 210% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.6 10.0537634409 155% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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