broad knowledge
Together with the improvements in society, it seems evident that people are required to have outstanding qualifications to succeed. Thus, there is a long-standing issue on whether it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject. While it is undeniable that both options have their own merits to boast, if forced to choose one over another, my stance is in line with the claim that having a broad knowledge of many academic subjects is preferable. My rationale is founded upon the following scheme; first, people could have more job choices available to them, and second, they could improve their efficiency and productivity overall.
First of all, it is beneficial for people to have a broad knowledge of many academic subjects they would be provided with many more opportunities to secure a job. These days it is extremely hard to obtain a job, with Time Magazine recently stating that the world's unemployment rate has reached its highest, five percent, since January 1997. With this situation, it is crucial for job seekers to increase their competitiveness in the labor force, and one of the easiest way to gain a competitive edge over others is to be able to work in different fields and possess various skills. It is only natural that job seekers who can work in two fields as opposed to just one will have twice as more job opportunities available to them, increasing their chances of getting employed. As a case in point, when my friend Jenny got into university, she chose to double major in Korean literature and mechanical engineering. By the time she graduated, she was able to apply to companies both as a journalist and as a scientist. While Jenny was not accepted to the former position, she was able to secure a full-time job as a researcher working for a multinational electronics corporation. With this example, it becomes clear that people should learn various subjects so as to increase their chances of securing a job.
The second fact that supports my standpoint is that students should have a broad knowledge of many academic subjects because they would be able to improve their efficiency and productivity overall. Often people who lack knowledge in a variety of fields are unable to think from different perspectives and can utilize only certain problem-solving methods. On the other hand, people with knowledge in diverse areas can approach problems with a more insightful outlook by combining various approaches and thus bringing about creative and efficient results. For instance, my sister majored in psychology and business marketing. When she worked at the local company, she and the other co-workers were directed to design advertisements for the company's new product. While the other co-workers who majored only business marketing just concentrated on delivering as much information about the new product, my sister contemplated how to grab the attention of customers as effectively as possible and convince them to buy the product. Consequently, with her knowledge in psychology, she was able to devise the best advertisement which led the company to a big success. This example demonstrates that having broad knowledge can increase a person's productivity and efficiency.
All in all, each and every fact demonstrates my resolute standpoint that it is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject because they could have more job choices and improve their efficiency overall. Therefore, nothing in my mind casts doubt on my stance regarding the given statement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 257, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
...Time Magazine recently stating that the worlds unemployment rate has reached its highe...
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Line 2, column 1254, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...at people should learn various subjects so as to increase their chances of securing a jo...
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Line 3, column 1228, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...t having broad knowledge can increase a persons productivity and efficiency. All in al...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, look, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for instance, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 52.1666666667 159% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3025.0 1977.66487455 153% => OK
No of words: 588.0 407.700716846 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14455782313 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9242980521 4.48103885553 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95801593583 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 278.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.472789115646 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 963.0 618.680645161 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.6062852537 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.5 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7272727273 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.90909090909 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202839241932 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0738078433936 0.076458572812 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100204638835 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150878531012 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623356478168 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 86.8835125448 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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