It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, every individuals is preoccupied and overwhelmed with their personal life so as to make subsistence of life. Parents are no exception to this very supposition. Since in this modern era, parents are busy with their professions and occupations, they spend less amount of time with their children. While some people believe that busy parents should spend their limited free time to play games and sport with their children or have some quality time and fun together, others stand at the other end of the continuum, holding the view that they should spend their time in schoolwork. Personally speaking, I believe that parents should spend their limited free time playing with children rather that delving themselves into doing schoolwork. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated upon hereunder.
To begin with, since in today's hectic world busy parent should spend time playing games with their children in order to support them emotionally. To be more specific, children need to be emotionally-secured from their parents which cannot be obtained unless parents spend time with their offspring. Psychologically speaking, when parents play games with their children, even in a limited time, the children will understand that they are a priority in their parents' lives. Spending time with children and playing games with them will positively affect their emotion and their sense of well-being. An example can drive this fact home. My husband and I spend more than 16 hours working in a day and as a result we can see our only child for one hour. When we arrive home after the work, we spend some quality time with our seven-year old daughter. Instead of talking about her schoolwork, we play and have fun together. Even though we do not see her during workday, she is emotionally-secured, because the way we treat her assured her that how much love and affection we have for her. Playing games and spending time with the youngsters have a significant and positive influence on their mental and emotional well-being.
Furthermore, parents who are busy with their life should provide an opportunity for their children to become closer to them and get to know one another in a better light. It is no secret to anyone that if parents or other family members be apart from one another, a weird sense of becoming a stranger will be rooted in the heart of them. To prevent this phenomenon, it is highly advised by psychologists to spend time with children in order to get to know one another better. As an illustration, I can vividly remember the time when I was eight years old and both of my parent had to work. Since they had to work all day long, I did not have the chance to spend time with them. After a while, I felt that they had become stranger to me and neither of us knew nothing about each other. Having consulted with a family counselor, my parents spend an hour in a day playing with me or taking me out in the park or a movie. During all these entertaining time, we used to talk not only about myself and my schoolwork, but also about my wishes and demands. Even if the time they used to spend with me was really short, it helped me as well as them to know each other and become acquainted with our personalities.
In conclusion, taking the aforementioned reasons and points into account, I strongly believe that parents should spend time playing with their children rather than being involve in schoolwork. The more the busy parents spend time playing with their child, the better they will become mentally and emotionally. Moreover, parents and children will become familiar with their personality and know one another in a better manner.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 162, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...nd overwhelmed with their personal life so as to make subsistence of life. Parents are n...
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Line 4, column 389, Rule ID: KNOW_NOW[4]
Message: Did you mean 'now'?
Suggestion: now
...ome familiar with their personality and know one another in a better manner.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, moreover, really, so, well, while, apart from, as to, in conclusion, talking about, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 13.8261648746 210% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 92.0 43.0788530466 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 94.0 52.1666666667 180% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3109.0 1977.66487455 157% => OK
No of words: 642.0 407.700716846 157% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84267912773 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03365860172 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70124402213 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423676012461 0.524837075471 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 941.4 618.680645161 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 3.51792114695 313% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4348262922 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.035714286 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9285714286 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35714285714 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218278593528 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783780002352 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764058321992 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176262391731 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0486871254589 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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