Children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smart phones, video games for fun and entertainment. Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for children's development.
Children love to play and as we know that technology is growing by leaps and bounds everyday. All these technological advancements like computers, smartphones etc have bound the children to spend lot of there time on them like playing video games etc. But are these sources of entertainment positive for the children or these sources have negative impact on their development. Personally, I strongly believe that playing outside with friends far more outweigh any negative repercussions.
To begin with, children are the future of the country, therefore health of children is of utmost importance. Playing outside in the open and fresh air will keep them healthy. Also the physical work in playing outdoor games such as football. volleyball, soccer, hockey etc will make their body more strong. Hence, children will gain extensive stamina and fitness, which will help them in doing studies efficiently and effectively. For instance, my ten years old nephew go out in the nearby park every evening to play with his friends. Initially he used to get sick every next day and felt so much tiredness after spending hours in school. When he started going out in the park, he got fresh air to breath and the fun that he got after playing with friends cured all his sickness. His health improved a lot when he started to play in open fresh environment.
Furthermore, children get to make more new friends. To play games in closed rooms does not allow them to interact with outer world and thus they are bound in their own lives and would not make new friends. As we all know friends are of prime importance in our life, without them life becomes boring and bland. However, the current technology is not allowing them to experience the feeling of spending time with friends. For example, during my childhood days, I used to go to play football in the playgound attached to our apartment. Gradually I made many good friends, who are still in touch with me and we spend hours talking to each other and also help each other in time of needs.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that playing outside with friends is better for the children because it provides them with a sound heath as well as children can make good friends and enjoy the fun of friendships.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 85, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...chnology is growing by leaps and bounds everyday. All these technological advancements l...
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Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...n and fresh air will keep them healthy. Also the physical work in playing outdoor ga...
^^^^
Line 3, column 242, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Volleyball
...playing outdoor games such as football. volleyball, soccer, hockey etc will make their bod...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1868.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82687338501 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56334396073 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519379844961 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0529565211 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.35 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 5.45110844103 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324569986334 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0951573295752 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707922836948 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226231845961 0.150856017488 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750591143871 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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