City should built shopping malls to attract customers
There is no doubt that with the improved modes of transportation tourism is common amoung individuals. Some people may claim that building A historical museum or indoor musment park may be the best choice to get the attention of the tourists. In my perspective it is pivotal to built shopping mall would attract more tourists. I would like to mention two main reasons for my point of view which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
The first compelling reason to stand with my opinion is rooted in the the fact that having shopping mall in my city would provide the luxury of all the essential clothes and costumes. These important materials would represent the clothing style of our culture which in turns would attract
the tourists. My opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own city experience. Ten years ago, my city lahore had decided to construct the best shopping mall in Pakistan. Our City wants to increased the visits of tourist. They spend an enormous amout of money to built the best mall of the lahore named hyperstar. That mall consisted of every kind of our clothes and costumes which represent all aspect of our clothing culture. I remember after few months of the existance of that mall alot of tourists from the different countries started visiting the hyper-star mall so they could buy special clothes related to our culture. because of that our city tourist attraction increased to more than twenty percent compared to previous year. This example demonstrates my point of view that shopping mall can attract the tourists.
Secondly, apart from the clothes shopping mall also have the shops of different artifacts which is the main component to represent any cutlutre.
Tourists loves to see the artifact of any Country. Therefore, shopping mall consisting of shops of artifacts would raise the tourist attraction. My own experience is a compelling exmple of this. When I visited United states of America. I decided to go to the best shopping mall in the Newyork. I went to the Macys. Upon my visit I saw the the famous pots to cook food. These pots and pans are famous througout the world. Alot of people were seeing buying these pots . I was amused to see that. So this example prove my perspective that shopping mall have artifacts which would attract the tourists.
In conclusion, from the above-mentioned discussion, I can say that building shopping mall by the city would be the best way to attract the tourists. This not only helps to provide the tourists opportunity to buy the famous cloth of any culture. But it also assist the tourists to buy the known artifacts which are the backbone of any culture.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, apart from, in conclusion, kind of, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2185.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 455.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8021978022 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52782606223 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443956043956 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 455.0 20.1344086022 2260% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2185.0 100.406767564 2176% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 455.0 20.6045352989 2208% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 104.0 5.45110844103 1908% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27753405287 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.27753405287 0.076458572812 363% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162378642799 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0450394374004 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 228.7 11.7677419355 1943% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -381.89 58.1214874552 -657% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 179.6 10.1575268817 1768% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.04 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 29.15 8.01818996416 364% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 10.002688172 540% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 184.0 10.0537634409 1830% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 184.0 10.247311828 1796% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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