A city wants to help teachers of its high school students (age14-18) improve their teaching. It is considering two plans, which one do you prefer?
• Choose a small group of excellent teachers; these teachers will attend a class led by an expert for additional training in how to teach effectively, and they will then come back to their schools and provide that training for other teachers in school.
• Provide additional training in teaching effectively for high school teachers, using online material that each teacher will study individually.
In today's modern and sophisticated world, improving teaching methods plays a vital role in enhancing educational systems. In this connection, there are several avenues, which help teachers to become accomplished. Although contested by many that the matter of some skillful tutors participate in the class to learn efficient instructions is highly beneficial, such an issue is regarded as both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I concur with the notion that it is informative for teachers to have online materials, which train supplementary subjects to be effective tutors for high school pupils, and I will analyze my reasons throughout this essay.
First, by providing an online source, teachers can study them sharply; thus, they can learn efficient methods, which are useful to know when they teach high school students. To be more specific, if instructors want to attend face-to-face classes, it dissipates a wealth of time to commute, leading to tiredness feelings for tutors. According to my experience, I should attend a class every day, and I travel between my class and home, which wastes a tremendous amount of time as I am stuck in the traffic. Moreover, when I arrive home, I should define homework for students and check their previous projects; thus, I become exhausted and feel sleepy during a class, which reduces my performance. Accordingly, I can not learn useful explanations that an expert tutor teaches us.
Second, teachers can learn online materials individually when they are available; however, in traditional classes, they should attend a class at a specific time, which is determined by a professor. To elucidate, each person has a different schedule in life, and they might be busy at the time that a class should hold. They are present in a class, but they are worried about their other duties. For example, my sister is a teacher, and she comes home at noon. After she arrives home, she should drive her son to the sports class. Unfortunately, her master class, which teaches her efficient approaches to become expert tutors, has an infliction with her son's class. Although I am responsible for driving him to a class, she worries about him during her lessons; otherwise, she studies materials in her desirable time without a distraction.
To conclude, while there are several arguments on each side, I profoundly believe that high schools should provide online sources for their teachers. Not only do online classes save instructors' energy, but they also give flexible study-time for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 252, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...also give flexible study-time for them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20338983051 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88833671226 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55205811138 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8488410469 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.388888889 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9444444444 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234434276438 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0778036377075 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397898781152 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149442455133 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381676514371 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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