Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others
think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
Nowadays, many people use the internet to get information. Although some people believe the information on the internet is valuable, others think this information creates problems. In my view, the information from the internet creates problems. That is due to inaccuracy and making people less creative. Moreover, people learn not to try hard in their life. I will explain my reasons hereunder.
First, sometimes the information from the internet is not correct. Moreover, all the sites not prestigious. Thus, this inaccurate information creates problems for us. For example, when I was a high school student, I searched my chemistry problem on the internet. Unfortunately, the site that explains my question was not reliable. Hence, I learn incorrect information, and it was so hard for me to forget this wrong explanation. Consequently, some information from the internet is not correct and creates problems in our life.
Second, access to too much information on the internet makes people less creative, and it causes problems. For example, two years ago, I wanted to make an airplane model, so, I searched the instruction on the internet and did not think about materials or instruction myself. As a result, access to too much information on the internet makes people less creative, and it will create problems.
Finally, too much available information on the internet makes people lazy. They do not learn to try to get information. However, they learn to get all the information with just a simple click. For example, if I have a research about whales, I will connect my computer to the internet and search whales on Google. I will not go to the library, read books, and learn about marine animals. Hence, I do not learn to make an effort for what I need. Consequently, access to too much information makes people think that they do not need to try hard in their life and they learn everything should be ready for them easily, and this attitude will cause problems for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 216, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
... a simple click. For example, if I have a research about whales, I will connect my compute...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, thus, for example, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.0752688172 223% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 331.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99093655589 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85328839123 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.444108761329 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 502.2 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9196729377 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 71.8260869565 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3913043478 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95652173913 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343511085184 0.236089414692 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113709233258 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102550527209 0.0737576698707 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232108730726 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646955939312 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.07 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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