A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position.
Some people would subscribe to the view that existence of a factory nearby would be beneficial for the locals, as opposed, others might subscribe to the opposite view. If I were to be asked, I would subscribe to the latter as I believe factories should be constructed in industrialized towns, far away from people and living creatures in that their existence might result in harms to the environment and animate creature.
First and foremost, many people may hold the view that establishing a factory in their neighborhood can lead to creation of more job opportunities for locals. This is really fascinating due to the existence of a lot of unemployed people who are highly educated and competent seeking for proper job opportunities. This can help them eventually find a job for themselves which holds the benefit of not commuting to the workplace. The job opportunity can enhance owing to being in connection with a network of suppliers and customers in the neighborhood. people can be in the middle of a myriad of opportunities which enhances their chance of finding a job and getting acquainted with entrepreneurs and people who know how to make a fortune well. And we all know that today it is all about networking. Additionally, people who are commuting from their homes to the factory area will make the adjacency crowded which causes an increase in sale for retailers in the area and thus, benefiting small businesses around the factory.
Factories release lots of materials which are highly contaminated into water, soil and the air we breathe. These kinds of contamination can pollute the surrounding area and effect general health of people and natural habitants nearby. The contamination resulting from factory pollution is mainly consisting of air pollution, toxic waste released in the water and soil which can diminish the life of inhabitants residing in those areas. The pollution coming from factories can influence our general health as well as declining our lungs health conditions. Additionally, working machines in the factories make so much noise which can disturb locals. Consequently, on the one hand, people can be in the middle of a myriad of opportunities which the factory brings, on the other hand, people are exposed to a lot of contamination due to high amount of pollution and toxic waste that the factory disposes of. I believe that the latter might cause more harm compared to the benefits which the former might bring. Moreover, all the people in the area will not benefit from a job opportunity owing to the fact that the jobs might not fit their expertise and skills, or simply they don’t need the job for that they have already been employed. To put it simply, all the people will suffer from the long-term harm compared to the few people who might actually benefit, not to forget the fact that those people are not immune from the harms the factory brings, either. Furthermore, with advent of computer and information technology leading us to a digital era, level of importance of manufacturing industry has declined. Nowadays, gross domestic product or GDP of a country is mostly owing to its’ service sector. As for many of developing countries, the GDP is 50 to 70 percent dependent on service sector, which is a substantial figure. Nevertheless, the importance of production industry cannot be totally denied as it still plays an important part in countries financial development. People are moving toward finding jobs in service sectors, however, as they are more promising, thus jobs regarding to working in a factory are not amongst popular jobs due to their harsh atmosphere and intense environment.
In a nutshell and due to the above-mentioned arguments, I strongly believe that the disadvantages of establishing a factory in the neighborhood outweigh the advantages. The harm and pollution disposed of factories can be very harmful to human’s physical and mental health. Carbon emissions resulting form factories can cause respiratory problems and the pollution might cause extinction of animates inhabiting in areas nearby. I hold the view that factories should be constructed in industrialized towns far away from people and natural habitats.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, really, regarding, so, still, thus, well, as for, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 29.0 9.8082437276 296% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 95.0 52.1666666667 182% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 8.0752688172 297% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3520.0 1977.66487455 178% => OK
No of words: 687.0 407.700716846 169% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12372634643 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.11963717896 4.48103885553 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96764937768 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 307.0 212.727598566 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446870451237 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1095.3 618.680645161 177% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.736501078 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.37037037 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4444444444 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 3.85842293907 311% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0770719275792 0.236089414692 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0269511355168 0.076458572812 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.02366083508 0.0737576698707 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.058947018732 0.150856017488 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237189136094 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 163.0 86.8835125448 188% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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