The company would like to invest in improving employees’ work. Which way do you think is better?
to help employees become more adept to new technology
to redesign the working environment to be more comfortable and spacious
In this competitive society, more employees have longer working hours but lower working efficiency. A feasible way to improve employees’ working performance is to redesign the working environment because a good working environment keeps employees energetic and in a good mood. Moreover, a company can also enhance its reputation by creating a better working environment.
First and foremost, a good working environment lifts employee’s mood. In this competitive business environment, people have longer working hours. The 40-hour a week traditional working style no longer exists, some office workers work more than 100 hours a week. Therefore, the longer working hours and bigger working pressure make it hard for employees to keep good moods. As we all know, a bad mood results in low working efficiency and less output. A good working environment provides a cure for such a situation. In a better working environment, employees tend to feel more relaxed and comfortable. As a result, they perform better at work.
Furthermore, a spacious working environment keeps the employees energetic. Nowadays, people tend to lead a sedentary lifestyle. With longer office hours, more white-collar workers become sit through the day, staring at the computer screen. Tight office space is one of the leading causes of this problem. For instance, my first internship is in a freight forwarding company. Its workstation is so small, that I can hardly put all my belongings in it. I had a miserable summer intern, almost stressed out by the bad working environment. In contrast, my second internship is in a manufacturing company, which has a spacious office. Every day I went to work with high energy because the working condition was very nice. In the end, I had much better working achievements.
Last but not the least, a nice working environment will improve a company's reputation, thus building a sense of pride among the workers and improving their work. Normally, big-name companies all have a better working environment than small companies. Take Google as an example. Google not only has a good canteen, which allows its employees to enjoy different cuisine around the world, it also has swimming pools and gyms. Needless to say, such a good working environment enhances a company’s popularity and motivates employees to work harder.
To sum up, a better working environment is worth investing in. A good working environment makes employees relaxed and energetic, and it also promotes the company's reputation.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...a result they perform better at work Furthermore a spacious working environment keeps th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in contrast, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 43.0788530466 49% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.0752688172 285% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.145 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85551659074 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 645.3 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 400.0 20.1344086022 1987% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2058.0 100.406767564 2050% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 400.0 20.6045352989 1941% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 123.0 5.45110844103 2256% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412769931127 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.412769931127 0.076458572812 540% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28844319272 0.150856017488 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559470097928 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 202.8 11.7677419355 1723% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -334.52 58.1214874552 -576% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 159.3 10.1575268817 1568% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.01 10.9000537634 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 26.4 8.01818996416 329% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 62.0 10.002688172 620% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 162.0 10.0537634409 1611% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 62.0 10.247311828 605% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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