Many young people face the problems of finding a job after graduation. Which of the following method would you recommend?
1. asking for others’ advice
2. sending emails to the companies
3. searching information on-line or other publications
In today's competitive job market, it is harder and harder for a new college graduate to find a job. Some people have trouble figuring out what they really want to do, let alone starting a promising career. From my perspective, asking for others' advice is the most effective and rewarding method to find a job.
To begin with, the most effective way to find a job is to ask for help. The person you turned to can tell you the most relevant truths and the most enlightening responses because he or she went through similar experiences many years ago. Therefore, asking the right person for help is much more effective than blindly sending e-mails to companies and searching for information online. My own experience serves as a compelling one. When I was a graduate student two years ago, I spent two months sending resumes blindly but got no reply. Defeated by reality, I turned to a career center instructor for help. The instructor pointed out there is a lack of coherence in my resume and helped me correct it. Two months later, I got my dream offer.
Furthermore, asking for others' advice deepens interpersonal relationships, which helps a lot in the workplace. A good social relationship helps you avoid mistakes, perform nicely, and increase the chance of getting an offer. For instance, one can turn to seniors to avoid any silly mistakes during a job interview. If he is lucky enough to get the offer, one can keep in touch with the senior and ask for more working tips. This builds a long-lasting interpersonal relationship, which might be very useful.
Admittedly, some people are too shy to ask for help when finding a job. Sometimes, one cannot find a trustworthy person to turn to. Under such circumstances, it is feasible to search for information online and go through the application procedures alone. But always bear in mind that there is much fake information online, it would be hard to distinguish goods ones from the bad ones. Therefore, one should be cautious when searching online information alone.
In conclusion, asking for others' advice is the best way to find a job because it is effective and deepens interpersonal relationships. In contrast, blindly sending e-mails to companies or searching for information online are risky and unrewarding.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
... months later I got my dream offer Furthermore asking for others advice deepens interp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, really, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84635416667 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80075552299 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497395833333 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 384.0 20.1344086022 1907% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1861.0 100.406767564 1853% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 384.0 20.6045352989 1864% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 100.0 5.45110844103 1834% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.312090259414 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.312090259414 0.076458572812 408% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194865195282 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067657567389 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 193.4 11.7677419355 1643% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -309.82 58.1214874552 -533% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 151.9 10.1575268817 1495% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.33 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 25.85 8.01818996416 322% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 54.0 10.002688172 540% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 155.6 10.0537634409 1548% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 156.0 10.247311828 1522% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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