Do you agree with the following statement? Some people claim that rules are too strict for young people to obey.
Every society may encounter various problems such as crime, delinquency, murder and so forth and it is widespread among young people. Societies have to solve these problems to flourish. Some methods have been proposed to cure the issues and one of the most influential ways is strict rules. While some people put forward the idea that rules are too strict for young people, other people rebut their claim. From my point of view, it is a good idea to implement strict rules in our society and it is not strict for young people. In the following paragraphs, I am going to explore two main reasons behind my perspective.
First of all, the rule is the rule and all people including children, young, adults and so on must follow them. There is no exception and all people have to follow. All people should know that they are the same and rules are equal among them. This is kind of fair. By performing such fair rules, neither young people nor elder people would avoid them. In such a community, it is a symbol of justice because they are equivalent to each other and society has discipline. Therefore, all people may do their tasks. It is generally proven that equal rules correlate with both economic growth and economic development. The reason is that people feel they are equivalent and have some burgeoning incentives to work hard. It is widely revealed that such an organized community would flourish more soonly compared to a society that has various rules for different age groups. Thus, rules should be equal for all people.
Another reason is that strict rule is a great idea. Many societies have adapted many strict rules due to the high rate of crime. Such rules would prevent many faults like murder. In other words, people would be fear of committing a crime. Many economic studies conducted in a wide area, concluded that government should implement rules as strict as they can because it not only has low cost, it also is a highly effective intervention in society to flourish. Its costs in comparison with its long term efficiency are negligible. Its costs contain performing cost, monitoring cost, supporting cost and so forth. In the long term, many crimes would be declined. Murder will be declined for sure. There may not be theft in a street.
Inconclusion, young people play a pivotal role in society and all societies have some troubles about young people which should be cured. Strict rules are one of the best ways to do so and it is not too strict for them because not only people are the same and rules should be equal but also it is a cost-effective intervention. So young people should undergo strict rules to make a better community.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, kind of, such as, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74784482759 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47739107887 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463362068966 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.7854416454 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.4333333333 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4666666667 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.36666666667 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371541218568 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103077162581 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0968942260398 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259879154668 0.150856017488 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0919356951016 0.0645574589148 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 11.7677419355 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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