Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Although science and technology will continue to improve, the most significant improvement for the quality of people’s lives have already taken place.
In this modern day and age, thanks to recent advancements in science and technology, nothing seems out of reach and impossible to achieve anymore. A question that might arise here is that whether the life of mankind has approximately reached its climax in terms of quality and convenience or not. Though there is no definite answer to this question, I utterly subscribe to the idea that the best is yet to come. To support my point of view, there are several perspectives, two of dominant which, are discussed in detail in the following.
First and foremost, although the medical field has been taking giant leaps over the course of the past few decades, there are still lots of questions we don’t have an answer for. It goes without saying that nowadays life expectancy has significantly improved in both the developing and developed countries. However, there are diseases such as certain types of cancer or diabetes that we can’t appropriately and efficiently treat, let alone cure. A recent research conducted at the Sharif University of Technology yields several interesting statistics one of which indicates that over the past twenty-five years, the rate at which people die because of stage four blood cancer has doubled taking the population rise into account. This paints a vivid portrait of how the health care system is incapable in terms of providing patients with proper treatments and cures even in this era that the world is changing at a rapid pace technologically. This insufficiency is not due to lack of management but rather because there is no effective cure yet for certain kinds of diseases. Finding cures four these diseases would be a remarkable breakthrough in medical science.
Furthermore, outer space is still considered a mystery to human beings. What we know about what is going outside of the earth's atmosphere is negligible. We are still searching for life on the moon and mars and we haven’t set a solid knowledge in this regard. It is no secret that our solar system, even the milky way galaxy is nothing in comparison to the space we have discovered its existence as a whole. There is a growing body of opinion that in the near future we can actually make other planets hospitable and utilize them in our favor. Our beautiful planet earth wouldn’t be considered the only planet that can support life and I think this would be so huge in no way comparable to everything else that mankind has ever gone through. Lots of problems would be overcome. Maybe money would not be a problem anymore and all people will finally be able to live together with peace since the resources are so abundant in other planets more than enough.
To wrap it up, contemplating what was discussed above, I am of the strong conviction that we, human beings, have still a long way to go to the peak of life quality. This is because there are still some diseases that we haven’t found any cure or appropriate treatment for them, and because we haven’t explored the space the best as we can. I believe that the story of us wouldn’t be ending soon and an exciting journey has just started.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 121, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'earths'' or 'earth's'?
Suggestion: earths'; earth's
...know about what is going outside of the earths atmosphere is negligible. We are still ...
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Line 5, column 226, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[4]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'solid knowledge'.
Suggestion: solid knowledge
...on the moon and mars and we haven’t set a solid knowledge in this regard. It is no secret that ou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2586.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 535.0 407.700716846 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83364485981 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70933660655 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 212.727598566 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551401869159 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 818.1 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.227589207 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.545454545 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3181818182 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04545454545 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0817607146803 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0206954776148 0.076458572812 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0259576079056 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0441810341948 0.150856017488 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0237239289586 0.0645574589148 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 86.8835125448 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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