Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Although science and technology will continue to advance and improve people s lives the most significant improvements in the quality of people s lives have already taken place Use specific reasons and | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Although science and technology will continue to advance and improve people's lives, the most significant improvements in the quality of people's lives have already taken place. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

With the ever-lasting improvement of technology and science, whether the most conspicuous enhancements in people's quality of life have already happened arouse a heated debate. Some agrees with the statement, but for me, I believe that the statement is true. I don't believe that science and technology will advance people's lives, and I agree that some conspicuous improvements have already taken place due to other factors. My reasons are as follows.

To begin with, one of the most important advancements in human being's quality of life is human rights, but science does not contribute that much to the human rights compared to humanitarian organizations. For instance, my roommate came from Sierra-Leone, and he was one of the survivors of massive human-trafficking in Libya. He was rescued by the Red Cross organization on a bus in the Sahhara Desert. In other words, it is the contribution of NGO volunteers that helped him escape the desert and establish a brand-new life in France. However, according to contemporary history, the two infamous atomic bombs dropped on Hiroshima and Nagasaki were the direct bloodchild of several physics research. In addition, a hundred years ago, scientists often did human experiment on war captives, which leaded to the death of millions of innocent people. Thus, human right can only be achieved though humantarian organizations, and science might ironically become the cause of human right crisis.

Digital security contributes to another crucial improvement in people's life quality, but the science and technology cannot achieve security. On the contrary, it is the altruistic intelligent people, not the technology itself, that contribute to the information security of modern world. As an example, when my parents were young, the World Wide Web is not invented yet. Citizens manage their assets directly through a trustworthy central bank. Nonetheless, the development of the web technology results in digitalization of nearly everything, including but not limited to our daily-life monetary system. However, the development of technology often fail to incorpate researches related to security. We have constantly seen citizens' bank account being cracked due to flaws in the design of digital banking systems. Yet, thanks to the unselfish contribution of white-hack hackers who are willing to devote their personal time in reviewing open source programs, several vulnerabilities were spotted and fixed before being exploited by criminals. Nowadays, the world wide web becomes secure again, and this is all because of the dedication and commitment of smart and warm-hearted contributors as opposed to technology.

To sum up, I believe that the most significant improvements that enhance people's life quality have already been taken place due to the aforementioned reasons. After all, contemporary human rights and digital security cannot be accomplished through the rapid development of science and technology.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, nonetheless, so, thus, after all, for instance, in addition, in other words, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 8.0752688172 310% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2510.0 1977.66487455 127% => OK
No of words: 454.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52863436123 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11861605099 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.563876651982 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 801.0 618.680645161 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0157402104 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.090909091 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6363636364 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.18181818182 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236890429521 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666338394926 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100282825341 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183951622915 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.141331026417 0.0645574589148 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 58.1214874552 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 10.1575268817 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.01818996416 119% => OK
difficult_words: 141.0 86.8835125448 162% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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