Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
When it comes to a live performance, some people think that it is definitely more enjoyable than watching the same event on TV, but I disagree with the point. There are some advantages of a live performance that watching the event on TV can't be comparable, however, there are also several advantages that you can't find on a live performance. The following paragraphs elaborate on the two reasons why I don't agree with the statement.
First of all, the enjoyment of attending a live performance depends on the factors of the event, such as time, weather, temperature, venue, audience, location, etc. If the event takes place in an open-air venue, the weather and temperature will be crucial. For example, nobody will be enjoyable when it starts raining during the event on an open-air court. In contrast, watching the performance on TV at home is quite different. You can control every condition in your own house, and your enjoyment will never be affected by the factors of the live performance. Therefore it won't spoil your pleasure whether the weather is bad or not. That is, you can keep in a good mood from the first to the last second.
The second reason is that you can feel free whenever you want to stop the event video or replay the wonderful moment, and you won't be worried about missing any detail of the event when you have to answer nature's call. Take me as an instance. I watched a live stage play with my family last year, and unexpectedly, I felt that I really needed to relieve myself in the middle of the show, but I didn't want to miss any second of the show, so I'd held back until the show ended. The next day, I was taken to the hospital because of acute cystitis. That was a quite painful experience, but it was still a hard choice to miss the show and leave for the restroom, or to hold back.
Although the watching experience of live performance is indeed better than watching on TV, from my point of view, the advantages of watching the same show on TV outweigh the disadvantages on the whole. In consideration of all the factors, I am convinced that watching an event on TV is more enjoyable than attending a live performance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, still, therefore, for example, in contrast, such as, first of all, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58397932817 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65679572439 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496124031008 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 556.2 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8090760466 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.352941176 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7647058824 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64705882353 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349505387563 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103635739484 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0764599644783 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216375694383 0.150856017488 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0687116540674 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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