Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Attending a live performance (for example, a play, concert, or sporting event) is more enjoyable than watching the same event on television. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
These days, people hold different tastes. Some people enjoy to attend a live performance, while others prefer watching television broadcast. As far as I am concerned, I am of the opinion that watching an event on television is better because it is easier and more flexible. This essay will provide further aspects and examples to support this idea in the subsequent paragraphs.
First and foremost, attending an event on television is more accessible and economical. To be specific, watching television needs only a TV set. Individuals are needless to buy a ticket or drive to the place where the event is performed. Additionally, people do not concern about the traffic congestion and can being late for the performance, so they can enjoy the play with a light mood. To illustrate this, when I plan to go to a live concert. I must strictly focus on my schedule because I need to arrive in the place on time. For this reason, going to a live performance is too serious, and it undermines your enjoyment on the live performance.
Secondly, another fact that supports my standpoint is that watching television is more adjustable. This is because people can attend the entertainments at any time and choose various events from many channels. Therefore, people can avoid a performance that they find it is monotonous, while others who join a live show cannot. I can attest this from my own experience; Televisions have many categories of performance that I can choose and record such as sport game or musical concert. Therefore, watching a favorite show on television is convenient because I can record the performance that show on my working time. Moreover, it is capable of watching more than one event at the same time.
In conclusion, I firmly maintain the belief that attending the event on television is more preferable. This is due to the fact that it is not only easier and cheaper than watching a live event, but it is also functional to change and record many stupendous events on its channels.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 55, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'enjoy attending'.
Suggestion: enjoy attending
...ople hold different tastes. Some people enjoy to attend a live performance, while others prefer...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92082111437 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91886542542 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495601173021 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 535.5 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.4723583514 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.3157894737 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9473684211 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.94736842105 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293630031217 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914906770976 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584020466725 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188134578083 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316049812833 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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