Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Some people say that in modern society it became easy to plan out things and prepare for individual's future due to highly developed risk prevention system and predictability of social changes. However, in my opinion, the ability to organize and prepare is even more crucial than the past, especially for young people. This is because the degree system became complicated, and also because their life cycle is quite different from that of the previous generation.
First, it's important for young people, especially who are academically passionate, to decide what to focus and set goals accordingly. Otherwise, they will fall into the bottomless pit of unemployment and dissatisfaction toward their condition. My personal experience will be a good example. In my 4th year in university, I couldn't decide which school or country to proceed further my degree. It was same for the exact field of a department that was undecided. Eventually, I couldn't avoid wasting a lot of time after graduation. Because I stayed unemployed and being uncertain about the future, that period of time was emotionally disturbing. This demonstrates that for young people who are eager to learn something, it's necessary to effectively plan out things.
Second, young people's life cycle is different from that of the previous generation, which is their parent's generation, which means that they are not obliged to follow particular life steps. In the past, it was almost mandatory for women to get marry in a certain age and give a birth to their husbands. The reason for lowering birth rate nowadays is partly due to the young woman's disenchantment. They would rather pursue their own career goals, instead of sacrificing their life for patriarchy society. This shows that possible choices for young woman have been grown, which requires a high level of scheming for one's future.
To sum up, the ability to plan and organize things is vital for young people more than other things, partly because it's needed for academic achievement, and mainly because they are less bound to certain ideology or pathway.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, first, however, if, second, so, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1751.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16519174041 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79316298657 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.566371681416 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6896255272 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.0 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9411764706 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41176470588 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232029128614 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670284972946 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533713281489 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151264422749 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376068925781 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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