Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Our world is changing over time, so it causes us to alter our lifestyle. Some people believe that can influence our happiness negatively. However, in my opinion, this alteration has made our life happier and satisfied. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the advancement of technologies in the modern era, which cause to make our life easier for us to enjoy our daily life. With today's technologies, we can do our activities more comfortably than past so it can make us satisfied. In addition, this progress can help us to prevent wasting time; subsequently, we have more time to do our favorite activities. Seen from another angle, improvement in transportation, for instance, help people to travel without difficulty; meanwhile, the duration of being on the road can decrease so they can spend more time having fun and enjoy their weekend. For example, people can travel by airplane so they do not have to spend more time on the way, and it paves the way for their trip.
secondly, changing the world includes changes in people's entertainment that cause them to experience more enjoyable times in their life. On the whole, people have various choices for doing a hobby, today. For example, cinema, watching different games, interesting parks, equipped gym and pool, and concert are few numbers of their options for being happy. Accordingly, people can choose one of them as a hobby due to their interest. Therefore people have many ways to be happy and satisfied, unlike past people who do not have any specific entertainment in their free time.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that people now are more a much happier and satisfying life than people were in the past. This is because the improvement of technologies makes life easier and comfortable and because people access a range of entertainment which makes people happier.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'making'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: making
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Suggestion: Secondly
...and it paves the way for their trip. secondly, changing the world includes changes in...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
... them as a hobby due to their interest. Therefore people have many ways to be happy and s...
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Message: Did you mean 'a more much'?
Suggestion: a more much
...I am of the opinion that people now are more a much happier and satisfying life than people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.946875 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78500273507 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5375 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2383925898 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9375 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0625 5.45110844103 203% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212750111615 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0848689107224 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0630971015874 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146520637456 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0557801537413 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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