Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should start working early in their life.
It goes without saying in this sophisticated and progressive world where we live, for adulthood period, preparing children and being independent is highly important. Recently there is a hot debate among people that this is necessary for children to work from early childhood, some people agree with this statement, but others stand in another side of the continuum and hold the view that this is a wrong decision. As far as I am concerned, the childhood is the only chance for anybody to care about playing and working is not for this period. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are elaborated hereunder.
To begin with, childhood is a section of life that we are knowing the world, children are curious about life, and their concerns are limited to play and joy, in my opinion, this is the sweetest part of anybody’s life, there is too much time for them to learn, work and being responsible for their life but childhood is a time for searching, touching and smelling everything with pleasure. An example can drive this notion home when I remember my childhood I had very beautiful moments which never happen again in my life and no one expected of me to behave specially and I was so free and could be near my grandparents who lived for several years in my childhood time, in contrary if I worked, I wouldn’t to be near them and use for years that were alive and be more with them hence I lost those experiences with them.
Moreover, psychologically speaking, if people cannot experience their childhood time as usual, they will look for it always even though they will be parents, like people who their behaviors and concerns are similar to children. Child psychologists believe that playing has a fundamental role for children and working damage to their psychological wellbeing, for an illustration working children who were stolen their childhood from them never analogous with children who play and enjoy themselves with their peers. Working is an obstacle for growing in a healthy way for any children, and we need laws for the prohibition of this great mistake.
As a result, having considered the aforementioned arguments and instances into account, there is not an obvious and utilitarian consequence in working for children, to me, this matter not only causes psychological disorders but also do not let them satisfy with this season of life which is extremely different with other parts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: know
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Message: Consider replacing "in a healthy way" with adverb for "healthy"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ers. Working is an obstacle for growing in a healthy way for any children, and we need laws for ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, moreover, so, well, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2006.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 407.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92874692875 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80311785518 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53316953317 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.6003584229 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.1344086022 199% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 113.940379146 48.9658058833 233% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 200.6 100.406767564 200% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.7 20.6045352989 198% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218392922246 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0955535982347 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072690295217 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144796195721 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0220321648515 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.1 11.7677419355 188% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.34 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.1575268817 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.0537634409 179% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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