Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The concept of family and its importance has changed over the years. Whether the extended family’s value has decreased or not, though, is a matter of intense debate. As far as I am concerned, I firmly believe that extended family is today as important as it was in the last decades. this position is based on two main reasons that will be analyzed thoroughly below.
members of the extended family, like grandparents, help in the care and education of the kids, in the same way that they did it in the past. The dynamism of the modern life does not allow parents to count with the time that their children demand. Therefore, it is quite common to see grandparents taking that role and helping with their grandchildren’s school homework or taking care of them, while parents are working. this is as usual today, as it was in the past. A compelling example of that my own son john. I have to work until seven at night. seeing the situation, my mother offered to pick up john at school and helping him with his homework until I arrive home. that was wonderful to him owing to he has improved his scores in the school’s test, thanks to the preparation that he has acquired with my mother’ help.
Secondly, the advice of an older family member and his experience, help them avoid making mistakes. The amount of information that the youngsters have on their hands is almost unlimited. However, nothing is comparable with the wisdom and the advice of someone more that has lived longer than you. For instance, I lived an a situation when I was a freshman university student that illustrate this idea. I have an uncle who engineer like me. one day I was struggling with a project for my electronics class, which was one of the most difficult topics for me. when he noticed that, he advised to try to look the problem from another perspective and divided it into smaller parts. To abbreviate a long history, the project that looked like a giant and complex problem, become more manageable when I split it into less difficult pieces. As a result, thanks to my uncle’s experience, I was able to overcome a challenging situation and to learn an inestimable lesson for the future.
In summation, I am of the opinion that it does not matter with time we are analyzing, the extended family always will be an essential factor in the childen’s development. this is because the help that they provide by sharing the responsibility in the care and education of children, and the experience that they could transmit them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, as a result, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76244343891 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82633522412 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524886877828 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2420337341 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5217391304 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2173913043 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.39130434783 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163812400488 0.236089414692 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459811694559 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349554674684 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956609818525 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0334095173489 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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