Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.
There is a heated debate concerning the importance of extended family in the modern society. While some people believe that the extended family plays a similar goal in the modern society, detractors disagree with that viewpoint, saying that the extended family is indeed less important now than it was in the past. In my opinion, I concur with the latter for two primary reasons.
First of all, there are many signs in a modern family revealing the change in the extended family’s role. For example, children today cannot memorize even the names of their cousins, aunts and uncles. In some cases, it is not even feasible for them to recognize the existence of their relatives. One cannot simply tell how many distant sisters and brothers he has. Moreover, the New Year Eve and Christmas used to be the time in which we celebrate parties with other members of our extended family. In contrast, Christmas parties nowadays are held individually by different branch of a household. Sending a postcard or a present to other parts of the family is simply a gesture that reminds people of their extended family.
Secondly, the tribulations of the modern life well explains why the extended family today plays a less important role than they used to in the past. To put it simply, people have to work for their living for five days of the weeks. In some countries, people only have five or six hours a day to rest since they have to work sixteen hours a day for seven days in a week. Therefore, it is almost impossible for people to have new relationships or maintain their connection to their extended family. My discussion with an accounting manager in Singapore is solid evidence for this argument. A year ago, I had the opportunity to talk with a woman who worked 15 years for a global enterprise as an accounting manager. She frankly admitted that she only had eight hours a day to sleep and other activities. The rest of the day is spent in workplaces. Moreover, she said that she had not think for a moment in her life up until now about getting married or going out for a date. The only person she only kept in touch with was her mother.
Some people may argue that people today are still deferential to their extended family. Although I share a mutual agreement that people still look up to their extended family and their extended family still plays a role in their lives, the importance of their family is not as significant as it was in the past. During the Chinese New Year, my family still pays a visit to other members of our extended family. However, it is regarded as a tradition to remind us of the importance of the extended family. Each member of our family has their own voice in their businesses. We hardly take part in other business as well as take advices from the other extended family members. My family’s decision is primarily independent of those made by other extended family members.
Taking into account the problems of modern society and a variety of signs in a modern family, I argue that the extended family is now playing a less significant role than they did in the past.
TOEFL listening discussions: Why does the student visit the registrar’s office?
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 881, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'thought'.
Suggestion: thought
...es. Moreover, she said that she had not think for a moment in her life up until now a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, frankly, however, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, in contrast, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2634.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 561.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69518716578 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86676880123 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55118888536 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.440285204991 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 844.2 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8217276242 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.8275862069 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3448275862 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31034482759 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 16.0 4.88709677419 327% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257100492874 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072966501796 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0861494411511 0.0737576698707 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152107166617 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105257805653 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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