Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The government should spend more money on
improving access to the Internet than on public
transportation.
In the modern era, internet have an indeniable role in the human’s life, many works doing with internrt and internrt access is the one of indices that is vital for all conteries. Altoght, many of cities and citizens need a network of public transportation, in my opinion spend more money on improving access to the internet is more important. In what follows, I will elaborate on my viewpoint.
The first exquisite reason that I must mention it is; the internet access save more money. When the government spend more money to improve access to the internet and make a further infrastructre in the case of internet, it produce a great opportunity to reduce many casts actually. For example, In the west asian contries like south korea and japan, the government spend more money and investigate to improve the internet access and give to their people higher speed internet access in comparison with the western Asian contires, therefore, their people have cheaper and easier access to the onlone shop and online library. They don’t need travel in the city and dont need going to the place for works, finally, they save more money.
The second reason that I prefer that the spend more money to improving the access to the internet is better is save more time. When you have a good access to the internet and the local network not only yo don’t need go to the outside of home, but also you stay at home and doing other works too. For example, when I was a master student at university, I was at dorm and have a PC with internet connection, Hence, I doing my works like thesis search and reading online book, reserving food, online shop and purchasing books, while, I was at dorm I saw many american liberiaries. My dormitory life was the best period of my life because, I were at dorm and make rest and have a more free time to exercise and improving my english language.
In short, Although, both investigation in transportation and spend money to improve intrnet access are vital, In my view spend more money to improve internet is more importance owing to, the internet access have a great beneficial that reduce people costs and give them more free time and cover many of the usual works.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'produces'?
Suggestion: produces
...rastructre in the case of internet, it produce a great opportunity to reduce many cas...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...don't need travel in the city and dont need going to the place for works, fina...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... The second reason that I prefer that the spend more money to improving the access to ...
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Line 5, column 144, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'good access'.
Suggestion: good access
...etter is save more time. When you have a good access to the internet and the local network ...
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Line 5, column 425, Rule ID: I_AM[1]
Message: Did you mean 'I am'?
Suggestion: I am
... a PC with internet connection, Hence, I doing my works like thesis search and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, in short, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1932.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95384615385 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7380005374 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.492307692308 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 591.3 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.6756501076 48.9658058833 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.0 100.406767564 160% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5 20.6045352989 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5 5.45110844103 193% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303206071362 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136343344507 0.076458572812 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827124042733 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214182846584 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445108049459 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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