Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The government should make it possible for all children to attend preschool (early childhood education programs for three-year-olds, for example) at no cost to children’s families.
Preschool will be an imperative education program for most growing children. This will raise the question of whether the government should make it possible for all children to attend preschool at no cost to children’s families. In my opinion, I disagree with this statement.
First of all, a full subsidy could also be provided via other private companies instead of the government because it would be an astronomical amount. For example, the Tainan City government once offered a full subsidy of preschool for every family in Tainan. However, this program would generate a financial scarcity for the local government because it cost about fifty million dollars per year. One year later, the government decided to cooperate with local businesses, like TSMC, which was the top-notch company in Taiwan. They determined to let TSMC burden the total fiscal outcome of this policy. Thus, the government could put more resources into other educational policies and avoid the economic crisis. Moreover, TSMC could also obtain a partial tax deduction. As a result, both the local government and this big company would benefit from this outstanding cooperation. By contrast, if this policy only was fulfilled through the government, it would produce a financial shortage of the local government.
Second, we could provide destitute families with some subsidy instead of offering full financial support to every family. As the example that I mentioned earlier, the Tainan City government provided a full subsidy for every family in Tainan. Yet, the government discovered that some wealthy families didn’t really need this fiscal assistance. Instead, these families could let their children learn many different types of courses, such as piano or painting, which would need more budget than preschool’s tuition fees. Thus, the local government chose to conduct an economic background survey of each family, like the total income of a family. Through this analysis, the government could make the best use of its financial budget to assist many families which were really need this economic aid. In contrast, if the government allot this capital to each family, it would not exploit this educational budget efficiently.
To sum up, these are the two reasons why I disagree with the statement. On one hand, this policy could also be offered by other private companies. On the other hand, it would not necessarily be allocated to every family.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
... most growing children. This will raise the question of whether the government should make it possible ...
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Line 3, column 786, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...partial tax deduction. As a result, both the local government and this big compan...
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Line 5, column 399, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...families could let their children learn many different types of courses, such as piano or pain...
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Line 5, column 772, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'needed'.
Suggestion: needed
... assist many families which were really need this economic aid. In contrast, if the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, moreover, really, second, so, thus, for example, in contrast, of course, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 13.8261648746 22% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30412371134 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6873720115 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510309278351 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6825542798 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5454545455 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6363636364 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.09090909091 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261843677397 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0845089068942 0.076458572812 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103441365216 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200833438112 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.165843604676 0.0645574589148 257% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.16 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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