Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
since the dawn of humanity, there has been a controversial debate among the fact that the government should invest in which kinds of activities to provide more gainful for all citizens. In this line of thought, some people are of the opinion that the government should spend money on athletic activities since it directly relates to the health of people. In contrast, I subscribe to the view that art has played a crucial role in the progress of human life. I feel this for two main reasons. In the following paragraphs, my ideas will be elaborated on this issue in more detail.
To begin with, it is no secret to the fact that individuals should foster not only physically but also mentally; the art contributes to growing mentally. generally speaking, art merges with emotions and feelings. it stimulates one part of the brain, which relates to the peoples' personality. To delve more into it, the more emotions people struggle, the more attention people pay to others. Therefore, the rate of violence and aggression will reduce. For instance, there is no evidence for this situation that an artist kills others, or insults other people as a result of improving dignity in their characters. All in all, with investing in art, the quality of life will heighten, and individuals learn to care about their society.
Another reason is that with supporting arts, the government can earn money because great artists will raise, and when they create a masterpiece of art, the government can sell it in international trades. Hence, the economic benefits would be a salient factor for a society that wants to foster arts and artists. Take this situation as an example. Nowadays, a variety of concerts are held throughout the world; people tend to participate in them even if they are forced to go abroad. For a society like the US, encouraging their residents to nurture in this realm of study, it would be a significant opportunity to make money from arts. Due to the fact that people are interested in concerts, movies, and theater more sports competitions, the tax incomes from arts are increasing every year.
Drawing upon the reasons that I mentioned above, although there are several exceptions excluded from general rules, I believe that the government should support arts rather than sports. Not only do people with an artistic sense of view grow well-behaved, but arts also aim to improve the economy and make money for the country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in contrast, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94403892944 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69180041085 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552311435523 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 10.0 3.08781362007 324% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7990712765 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.6 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.55 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195114741097 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0517758916097 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538336690425 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127914147267 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420505142373 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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