Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should focus their budgets more on environmental protection than on economic development.
We all know that governments need money to spend on different realms; this budget is limited; therefore, politicians need to decide where to invest the money. I firmly believe that governments should emphasize economic development. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, economic developments have significant positive effects on social security. When the government invests the budget in economic developments, there will be more job opportunities available; thus, unemployment rate will decrease. Because of this, people who used to threaten social security by robbing people would have a better chance to get employed and stop stealing. A friend of mine is a compelling example of this. He was an employee in Turkey with a nine-to-five job at an office when an economic crisis happened in 2010. Due to the crisis's impacts, the bureau he was working for had to downsize him to reduce its expenses. Suddenly, he lost everything and became homeless. His daughter was suffering from skin cancer, and her treatment did cost a lot. He had no choice to fulfill his and her daughter's needs but to steal money from people with his friends' help. By doing so, the neighbor wasn't safe anymore. It went on until the government made constructive decisions about the economic developments; thus, the company he used to work for gave him back his old job. Hadn't Turkey's government made the aforementioned decisions on economic developments, he would still live in the streets and threaten people.
Furthermore, economic development leads to the growth of people's life quality. Nowadays, living expenses are increasing, and families need to cut off some of them to outlast. In many cases, education is the most likely one. Five years ago, when my son was a seventeen-year-old teenager who was getting prepared to enter college, she asked me to pay for his extracurricular classes. At the moment, the aforementioned economic crisis raised life expenses so high that I couldn't afford his classes' fees. Fortunately, after a year government lent a hand to people by lowering the taxes. Thus, I could fund my own company. It was a life-changing tweak for me that improved my life quality. Hadn't the government taken down the taxes, I wouldn't have a great life as I do now.
In conclusion, I think governments should invest money in economic development. This is because economic developments improve social security, and also by growing economics, people will live a better life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, so, still, therefore, thus, i feel, i think, in conclusion, first of all, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2120.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10843373494 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99768721031 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585542168675 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.2321399938 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.5384615385 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9615384615 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.69230769231 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156404085731 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0445457093851 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.046358190277 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10700711531 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0277566788296 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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