Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Governments have always been investing in both arts and athletics due to their paramount importance. However, some people think that funds should be allocated more in support of arts. In my perspective, athletics should be put on a higher priority.
First, sports help bond citizens in the nation. In times when their athletes triumph, people tend to set aside their personal conflicts in order to enjoy common success, cementing national solidarity. For example, when our national football team won the AFF Cup in 2018, every household across the country was indulged in joy and excitement, and people swarmed into roads and corners riding motorcycles around, flying our national flags, and celebrating our historical accomplishment even though they did not play. The joy and national pride brought people closer. As streets were so crowded, traffic accidents were inevitable. However, instead of a resulting normal fight, strangers in the streets shook hands or even embraced each other to share the happiness. Obviously, this enhances the unity of society. Henceforth, by devoting more money to athletics, sportspeople can achieve more success in international competitions, which in turn amplifies pride as well as patriotism of the people, an effect that no art can ever make.
Second, increasing funding for sports is also a great way to encourage people to exercise, which improves their health and productivity in their workplaces. At present, especially in poor countries, exercising facilities are still not very pervasive, so it is difficult for the general public to engage in sports. Given more funds, countries will be able to buy facilities that can be installed in every neighborhood, which in turn will boost the common people’s sports spirit. Once people exercise regularly, they will surely have more energy for their work, enhancing their productivity. On the other hand, arts do not bring major economic benefits to the country. Arts are abstract and people are required to have a basic knowledge foundation to enjoy it, which may prevent people from enjoying artworks on a massive. Thus, art shows or galleries have a high chance of failing. As a result, investment in arts generally does not yield any fruitful economic results.
In conclusion, I assert that spending money on athletics would be a wise choice. This is because it cements the bond between people in the country as well as boosts their efficiency, whereas arts do not have any promising merits.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, may, second, so, still, thus, well, whereas, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30478589421 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89190706476 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.609571788413 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.6722734493 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.3 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.85 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108746902443 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0356021410164 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0393004952038 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0864144348842 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0527152138773 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 11.7677419355 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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