Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Form a general point of view, governments posses the most resources of the countries and they decide for the organization's budget. Since these decisions severely impress a country's situation, the amount of money they often allocate to different organizations of the country is one of the most controversial subjects, which often provoke many discussions. Some people keep endorsing the claim that governments should spent more money on arts than backing athletics, whereas others dismiss this idea. It is my firm conviction that patronaging sport and athletics is of a more significance than spending money for arts. In what fallows, I will elucidate on what rationales my perspective is based on.
The first and foremost reason is that sports are directly contributed to the community's health status, and spending much more money to it will affect the health status of the citizens. To be more specific, individuals, particularly adolescents, keep tracking the most prominent points in the society and tends to follow what is more promoted by the society. On the other hand, governments are capable of promoting sport and physical activities by spending more money to support sport and athletics. Therefore, this support made them conspicuous and inspire individuals to follow athletics. Moreover, a significant part of this budget can be spent on constructing more sport facilities or improving the current equipment. So, more well-equipped and several gyms lead to attracting myriad of the community to do sport.
Secondly, sport is a general and public activity than arts, and contributes to all society including all groups of age. To be more specific, merely a special section of the society which have a special interest and grasp of arts pay are considered to be contributed to arts. In fact, several aspects of arts are just appreciated and perceived by a group of people and only people are involved in them particularly. Even more, hardly can addressing arts can be considered compulsory for all individuals since it is not a necessary thing for the society's public benefit such as health. Actually, it is kind of individuals' personalization and disposition.
To put in a nutshell, personally I am of the opinion that governments should spend more money on sports and backing athletics than artists. This is because not only sports are mandatory and inevitable for public health and these supports provides motivation for people to follow it, but also is it related to all people not just the ones which are interested and talented in art
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, whereas, in fact, kind of, such as, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2143.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17632850242 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9992579617 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8599412271 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.055555556 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.22222222222 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233418563197 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0770880925808 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0660382464142 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150630332208 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497581267323 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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