Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I disagree that the governments need to allocate more money to arts rather than sports. I will discuss my reasonings in the following essay.
First, I believe one of the biggest issues is if the majority of people can appreciate and understand each field. for sports people do not need to have a vast amount of knowledge to understand what is happening. this means that all of the people can join the excitement of sports and enjoy the competion, but the same is not applicable for arts. In art people need to be knowledgable about different majors of the field and know how each part is connected to other parts to appericiate it. for example, every body understands that in volleyball you need to hit the ball so it hits the ground of the opponents field, but for arts you need to understand a lot more to tell the difference between good and bad art, and understand the judges decisions, while each and everyone holds their own perspective about good or bad art.
Second, Olympics is not just a program that people compete in but rather a show of each countries power this has held true for many years. this means that each country using fields and programms understandable by the majority of people in the world shows it's might and prestige, and the people of each country may even flaunt around the achievements of their fellow countrymen. For example, in the news when the anchor talks about a country they may say something like "this eternal winner of the swimming field..." this shows the importance and value of the achievements made during competitions, while the same cannot be said for arts, I have never heard competitions in arts pointed as a major issue between countries.
In conclusion, I believe that the allocated money towards sports cannot be divided and be given to the arts field, because sport is a field that everybody can understand and enjoy, and at the same time big events such as Olympics help raise the prestige of the winning country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74202898551 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67399748502 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.0136479448 48.9658058833 202% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 148.727272727 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.3636363636 20.6045352989 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.089215570415 0.236089414692 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455139217097 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556919585874 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0854040240582 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728563646732 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 11.7677419355 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 58.1214874552 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 86.8835125448 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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