Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In a current generation, sports and history are both important, because they represent the nations.. However, the question is all about which one should get more funding? Some people believe that Physical activities are important, while they helping every person in the society to become a health and others feel that, since the technology growing; most of the traditional arts are in the extent stage. So the government should support them first. On the other hand, I believe a government should give equal financial support to both art and sports for reasons I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, sports and art both are playing a unique role in society. The sports speak for the nation’s talent and the art show the culture and the tradition of the country. Moreover, not everyone in the country might interest in both the activities, some might sport and others not. My friend Alex is a good example of this when he was studying high school at Omak public school; he was a national level athlete in running but he is not having enough financial support for his training. The school administration took a decision and wrote a letter to the city mayor for funding. As a result, the county mayor announced the decent amount for support. What more, he got the national level gold medal in running. He said it is not possible without school and government support. This example clearly states the importance of government funding for sports.
In addition to that, art is the lifeless talent in the current trend due to lack of support. So, the government should support and encourage them to revival their talent because they are the people teach the culture and tradition to the modern society. There are very few people who know the unique talents that cannot fulfill with modern technology; so the government has to announce the fund for them to encourage and protect the art such as ancient rock temple, museums and so on. Taj Mahal is a great example of this, even though it is a tomb, it is designed with thousands of art workers with their immersive talent and they build without shadow. Initially, the government did not take any care, as a result, it has a few crakes. Although, the people tried to reestablish with advanced technology; it doesn’t match with the original. Now, the government realized and announced fixed fund annually. This example clearly shows the importance of art and how important to protect.
In conclusion, although People not convincing, I personally believe a government should give parallel priority to both. Because one is important for representing the nation and other is for preserving the culture.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, while, as to, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2221.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 450.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93555555556 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62888137502 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497777777778 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.067647638 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.5416666667 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.83333333333 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21999370401 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681845626268 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583031417952 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127987408306 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545729873005 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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