Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Our government has tremendous leverage on our quotidian routine life. It influence in a direct and intangible way. It is utterly important to appreciate their financial support and provide many services to the people because of its indelible impact on the society. Although some people hold the viewpoint that capitalization of arts are more momentous because it is represent the country's culture. However, other people may hold a different intellect and disagree with this notion.My personal experience and actual observation of life which had led me to agree with the idea that pecuniary support to sports are more importance . In the following essay I shall delve into must outstanding reasons.
To commence with, athletics need more equipment, medical insurance, and abroad training teams. All these needs extensive money support to provide them. For instance, my country, Iraq, has never reach the Olympic's games or Asian continent games. My government start new plan to import training team from Brazil which cost a formidable expense. Besides, always the team members are subjected to bad injury and some needs to certain surgery which needs to send the player to other counties for better medical treatment. Apparently, it must be taken into account the art does not need a lot of financial support and myriad of the revenue from the admired people with the arts.
In addition, the people who watch and attend sports games are more than arts . This fact, indeed, can provide the countries with more money return to them. Eventually, the government will increase its revenue from both aspects. Financially, because it could collect more money from the people who attend the games. Socially, because the reputation of the country will be ameliorate globally and the individuals will be proud of the development and achievement that their country reach. For example, for the same example above, the Iraqi citizen became more proud of their country since the sports team win the third reward on Asian continent games for football. Furthermore, the number of people who start encourage their favor local teams increase and the government start hold more games events and the income of the government increase dramatically. In view of the fact that without government financial support, the country could still many steps behind others and this will lead to disappointment of their citizens as well as less money return to country.
To sum up, after contemplating the reasons that I mentioned before, taking all the factors into account, I would reinforce my idea that financial support to sports are more important than arts because the athletics need more supplies that are much more costly than arts and this will increase the country income financially and socially.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, besides, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, third, well, for example, for instance, in addition, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2340.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23489932886 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62656514186 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507829977629 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.5265264259 48.9658058833 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.428571429 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2857142857 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52380952381 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220808855662 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649024728094 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501523845382 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146647939422 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0209532304669 0.0645574589148 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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