Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There is a widely discussion on whether government should spend money on arts or on athletics. Some people think investment on arts will improve residents' cultural confidence which will benefit the country, while others claim that money spent on sports events will stimulate local economy and urge citizens to exercise and to build a healthy body. From my perspective, I believe arts and athletics are equally important for our nation. Thus, I think government should spend the same amount of money on sports and arts. My statement bases on following reasons.
On the one hand, spending money in support of athletics may encourage people spending time on exercise. If your country invest money on sports event like Olympic teams or build some new gyms, you are possibly inspired by such investment and want to learn more information about relative sports. Once you are interested in such events, the next step you take is possibly go outdoors and try out such events, and at the same time, the new courts built by local government also give you changes to do some exercise. Therefore, the money spent on athletics is very likely to attract people to exercise and eventually build a healthy body.
On the other hand, it's also important for government to support art which could receive result of improving in citizens' art sense. In most cases, art is a field that you need to put in a lot of money which can finally have outcomes. If the government choose not to invest money on arts, there be very possible that the future country will never produce any new valuable art pieces. Take my hometown as example, the local government decided to stop support city art center because of financial problem. And recently when the administration wanted to rebuild the place, they had hard time to find any people who have ability to charge of art center, because the former artist left the city and the neglect on art education lead to extinction of local artists. It's obvious that investment on arts are very necessary for a city or a country.
All in all, arts and athletics are both important for citizens' life. Arts offer us cultural confidence and athletics improve our health conditions. Thus, we need to support both arts and athletics.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, i think, in most cases, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85602094241 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50823729969 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505235602094 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.305671347 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.055555556 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2222222222 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269835006434 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925232502854 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503806564311 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163130901769 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305858455643 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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