People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
According to a research conducted by National Tourism Administration, we can conclude that more and more people choose to spend holiday in foreign country rather than their own country. However, from my prospective, I believe that these people can benefit more if they choose to travel in their own country on vacation. My statement is supported by following reasons.
First of all, traveling in our own country can help us get knowledge about our country and culture. With the development of internet, people nowadays are able to learn information all over the world, while they have tendency to ignore things happening around us. Thus, taking a trip in our own country is a best way to know more details about our country and our culture. For instance, I didn't know much thing about the town I living before visiting the town's museum few months ago, and I built a strong confidence about the culture environment around my living place after that trip. I strongly recommend everyone should visit local museum, park or other spots and it's really beneficial to many aspects.
Furthermore, traveling in our country is much cheaper than taking a trip abroad. In the modern society with high pressure, we all have a tight budget in our daily life that we expect an inexpensive vacation plan. Therefore, I think traveling in our own country is an ideal plan for our holiday because of its low price. Take myself for example, if I choose to travel abroad in my summer vacation, I may run out of all my deposit, but domestic travel plan can save half of money which I can use to buy new books, clothes or other things in the next semester.
All in all, we can get so many merits through a domestic travel that it's obvious that people benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1506.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75078864353 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53002352104 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542586750789 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3355129636 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.846153846 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3846153846 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76923076923 5.45110844103 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417320564174 0.236089414692 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158392466615 0.076458572812 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.188250271204 0.0737576698707 255% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.337817689296 0.150856017488 224% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.219668971035 0.0645574589148 340% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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