In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
With the development of society, more and more children are able to acquire money from their parents since their childhood that they have opportunity to spend money in many aspects or save it at young age. From my perspective, I have strong belief that children should learn to manage their own money and they will benefit a lot from that in the future. My statement is based on below reasons.
First and foremost, learning how to manage money can assist children build proper financial awareness which is essential in the modern society. Nowadays, economic environment has tendency of increasing complexity that knowledge about managing money start to show its importance for everyone in every ages. By contrast, children who don't learn possession management will face several problems when they become adult. For instance, my uncle had experience to manage his own money when he was in primary school, and he cultivated a habit of deposit which help he get through big economy recession past few years ago.
Furthermore, managing money can also make children become more responsible for their own life. Because money is part of a person's life, if you can well-manage your money, it's a good start to well-manage your life. It's a good start point for parents to teach their children to take responsibility for their life. Take myself for example, I started to manage my money at very young age and when I got in university, I never faced budget crisis like my peers because I have knowledge about how plan to money spending in a long period.
All in all, providing children with chance of managing their own many is a really good way for them to become financially responsible adults. There's no reason to prevent young kids to manage their own money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, really, so, well, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1458.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 298.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89261744966 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58975192023 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56711409396 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8097338413 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.153846154 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9230769231 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61538461538 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.46715443628 0.236089414692 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.172020378789 0.076458572812 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926021379068 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.298717797864 0.150856017488 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650557833474 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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