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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement？

Grades (marks) encourage students to learn.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

As education system continues to develop, the value of grade as a proper assessment has called in to question. Some people believe this way of measuring can stress out kids. Personally, however, I believe it is the rightest way to evaluate kids' performance at school. I feel this way for two main reasons' which I will explain in the following essay.
To begin with, I highly believe anything that goes obsolete and useless will be eliminated by time. However, since schools were first officially established, grades have been the only assessment. Ample things have changed in education system since old times, but this stayed as a stable factor. This is a prove to the efficiency of this system, it had worked on my parents and as well worked on me. Therefore, I am of the opinion that this is a strict side of school and education, which make students take it serious. For instance, I remember when I was kid, I had so much fun with my classmates and friends. The only thing that declined my wasting time with my friend was the fear of my transcript and final grades. Hence, I felt a pressure to study hard and it benefited me when I grew older.
The other significant reason is that everyone expects a reward on their hard works. Grades are the awards of school time. They are assessments that lead to separate brilliant students and praise them in front of their peers. It also can be a motivation for other students to try harder, since most kids want to draw attention of adults and this is a very healthy way of doing that. My nephew's experience is a compelling example of that. He was really distracted when he was at elementary school. He barely could sit in a place and study for even an hour. His mind was focused on his video games and he couldn't care less about school. However, in a family gathering when his cousin received a gift from my father for her great performance at school, he envied and after that he invested a little of his time and effort on school stuff. This helped him to improve a lot.
In conclusion, I see grades as an effective way to evaluate students at school. This is because usually things that are not helpful or efficient will not survive during long time, plus this is a plausible way to reward children based on that or motivate them to try harder.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 303, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...this stayed as a stable factor. This is a prove to the efficiency of this system, it ha...
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Line 3, column 602, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...d was focused on his video games and he couldnt care less about school. However, in a f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, really, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1880.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53012048193 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51724088425 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544578313253 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.5059794969 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.3333333333 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2916666667 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0748546241458 0.236089414692 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0246619158385 0.076458572812 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0255579388672 0.0737576698707 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0478974648037 0.150856017488 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00460100300598 0.0645574589148 7% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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