Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Using specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
working is a self-perpetuating asset in everyone's life. In this regard, there is a long-standing discussion among people whether they enter to work environment as soon as possible or wait for commencing their desirable vocation. Some people believe that individuals should immediately find a job and they have not to lose their opportunity to get a secure job. Others, however, advocate the idea that people should explore a lot to find their favorable job and be sure about their choice. I personally, concur with the latter.
first of all, a young first real step to adulthood is making a job and if person does not like his job, he/she will suffer a defeat in his/her first life step. he/she may get fired from intended job or is not promoted at all. people should gather information as much as possible in order to understand what job is proper for them and must not rush to choose their career. For example, I can recall when I decided to find a job. I had an opportunity to work in a big company as a supervisor engineer with high salary, great virtues, less time working, and to name but a few. first, I could not ignore its benefits and advantages but when I though about my interest, I found out I did not like that job and it was not my interest. I wanted to be a structural engineer, so I wait for a job that would be more satisfying. it was very difficult situation because I did not have enough money to make ends meet and spend my life and I was forced to borrow money from my father. After seeking a lot eventually, I found my vocation and now I am very satisfied with my choice. I could obtain all of the virtues that I expected from a good job such as high salary, less timework, more bonuses, and to name but a handful. Not only do I returned my debt but also I have a lot of money in deposits.
Secondly, consider a person who compulsorily get a secure job to provide his family with salubrious life. however, he has a convenient life and get a lot promotion in his job, he has not paid attention to his interest and he maybe is not satisfied with his job in the end, so he feels that his lifetime has been wasted and it was better to choose a job related to his interests rather than a job that he did not like.
All in all, I really believe that people should consider their interest in commencing a job regardless the opportunities that guarantee their future but they do not interested in.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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working is a self-perpetuating asset in everyon...
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...er a defeat in his/her first life step. he/she may get fired from intended job or ...
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...intended job or is not promoted at all. people should gather information as much as po...
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...ss time working, and to name but a few. first, I could not ignore its benefits and ad...
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...or a job that would be more satisfying. it was very difficult situation because I ...
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...atisfied with my choice. I could obtain all of the virtues that I expected from a good job...
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...rovide his family with salubrious life. however, he has a convenient life and get a lot...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, as for, for example, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1979.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 449.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40757238307 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65053058357 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478841870824 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 637.2 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6875198805 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.157894737 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6315789474 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.68421052632 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275312772285 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0924576082834 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0737553135039 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172692381028 0.150856017488 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376892554702 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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