Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Investing the precious time on doing things that one enjoy, it is the best quality of one's lifestyle. Many people think that everyone should be able to wait for that perfect moment until they find their favorite job. However, others argue that individuals should take any opportunity and take advantage of it. As far as I am concerned, I firmly believe that people should get a secured job rather than wait for the job that would give them more satisfaction.
First of all, having a job it is crucial for people's income. Accepting doing any kind of job even though the job is not suitable, that would make it possible for people to not struggle with any of financial gaps. If civilians wait until they find their favorite job, they would face economic problems. To be more specific, my experience is a compelling example of this. A decade ago, when I came to America, I worked too many different jobs until I found my current job. During all that time, I was able to cover my expenses. Not only I was able to pay my bills, but also I saved a small amount of money, which I used to pay for qualifications that I needed it for my new job. That is why, adults should consider to work any kind of jobs, so they could have their incomes flowing, and not facing any financial difficulties.
Another reason why people should accept working random jobs, which may not match with their field of expertise is that they would gain a different experience. This new experience might help them in the long ran, throughout their lives. For instance, about twenty years ago, after my brother got graduated, he could not find any job in his field. At the being, he felt uncertain about his future, but that impression changed when he found another job, which was completely new for him. He did not let that opportunity to go away. he took the job as a challenge. As a result, he learned new skills, which he found it very helpful to his overall preparation. If he had not accepted to get that job, he would have missed that experience, which he is grateful right now.
In conclusion, people should try to work and get advantage of job opportunities that cross their ways. This is because that would help them to not face financial gaps, and because they would be able to gain new experiences that may help them down the road.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 87, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...at one enjoy, it is the best quality of ones lifestyle. Many people think that every...
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Line 3, column 422, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...o, when I came to America, I worked too many different jobs until I found my current job. Duri...
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Line 5, column 530, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...id not let that opportunity to go away. he took the job as a challenge. As a resul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1900.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54545454545 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47010003823 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492822966507 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 583.2 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.4258495545 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.3636363636 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.68181818182 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33644267514 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105113629032 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776410002165 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220833455593 0.150856017488 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832579756585 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.11 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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