Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, we live in a fast-paced society; therefore, it is critical for our well-being, especially people's economy to be managed effectively. If children gain this skill at the early age, that would help them to be successful. Many think that financial responsibilities should be taught when is needed. However, I firmly believe that children should be cautious of spending their money in a more responsible way, and that would have better been explained in the early age.
One of the reasons why youths should be taught on how to become responsible for their expenses is that at a young age, their ability to think is sharp and they could quickly learn anything. My experience as an adult who went through the process of learning how to manage my money at the early age, is a compelling example of this. About three decades ago, my mother taught me about saving accounts and actually she opened my first bank account, so I could save money, which, I was going to use it for fulfilling my goals. After I learned about savings and the reason why I had to save. The sense of being responsible grew naturally on my actions toward expenses. As a result, as I grew older, I felt more empowered toward my ability to efficiently manage.
In addition, contrary to the belief that young adults are very young to learn and be held financially account, evidence has shown that children who were ought on how to become financially responsible, did succeed in their future. They were capable of becoming independent and get a sense of accomplishment. For instance, a survey held by the University of Toronto, reported that students with past knowledge on how to spent their money had everything in control and their bank credits were astonishing. Compare with students who did not have learned this new skills at an early age. These students struggled financially. Overall, teenagers who know how to manage their money at early age would not lack financial foresight in the future.
In conclusion, learning about being budget-conscious at the early age is critically important for our well-being. This is because children are capable of learning quick, which is a quality that characterize that generation, and because evidence has shown that children with past knowledge on management of their money never faced any problem in the future,my own money. According to this experience, children learn rapidly and are capable of understanding how to manage their own money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, however, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1982.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 396.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00505050505 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46091344257 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85939328997 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 621.9 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.5607727629 48.9658058833 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.588235294 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2941176471 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313761815506 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105532461297 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666065485619 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211813972378 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0510366080679 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.