Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Our life is full of opportunities some brings long term benefits others are for short term good. The desire to success is a primitive goal of human being from cradle to grave. The grab the opportunity in a fast way is the right than to wait for long time to meets the satisfaction is the given prompt and with this I am pretty sure someone would concede others would not. In my view, choosing job only short term advantage is the reason for potential negative impacts for the following two important reason.
The main reason is that selecting job without discreet thinking causes harm for someone career. It is possible to get the job but if it is not becoming with hearts then reaching high tier on that job is difficult. To be promoted many things are required such as, eagerness, patience and assiduousness. If one of these things were missing then being promoted is quite difficult. For example, last my cousin was joined an officer in a pharmaceutical companies. Previously, he had completed his graduation from a well reputed university and his long term goal was to become a researcher. But, his economic status had forced him to join on that job. Later, he did not concentrate on the company’s jargons and works. The, he left the job after only four months. In the meantime, he has lost his eagerness to become a scientist. As you can see that, without thinking joining a kind of job would cause the lowering the person own interest area.
Another reason is that the success is come from those people who nurture their own interest. It is hard to get the success until you achieved the kind of level. The scenarios is quite clear if we stare the influential people in our world. For instance, when I was reading in a college, I have been getting a chance to read a biography on Einstein. The biography disclosed, Einstein was not able to discover the theory of relativity within a short time. It said, after working in a tireless manner such as teaching one country to another country, participating seminar and presenting his ideas, he became able to establish his theory. This experience taught me that, working passionately in a respective area enhances to get the success.
In sum, although it is arguable to describe different benefits of joining a job without thinking long term but the harm it brings is hard to recompense for that person to bear. Choosing job only by mind not only satisfy the person but also promotes a greater benefits for all human kind. So, we should give first priority of our mind choice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 202, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a fast way" with adverb for "fast"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...adle to grave. The grab the opportunity in a fast way is the right than to wait for long time...
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Line 1, column 394, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to job'
Suggestion: to job
... others would not. In my view, choosing job only short term advantage is the reason...
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Line 3, column 303, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... eagerness, patience and assiduousness. If one of these things were missing then b...
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Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...hieved the kind of level. The scenarios is quite clear if we stare the influential...
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Line 5, column 477, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a tireless manner" with adverb for "tireless"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...in a short time. It said, after working in a tireless manner such as teaching one country to another...
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Line 7, column 187, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to job'
Suggestion: to job
...pense for that person to bear. Choosing job only by mind not only satisfy the perso...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, well, as to, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71011235955 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63214664007 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539325842697 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.146999882 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.84 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219080031692 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.054407183552 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0471527689323 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127261799932 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434754262726 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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