Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Getting a job is one of the important parts of life for anyone. We need to take a job to get money to be able to live in the world. I agree with the proposed statement, personally speaking, I think that getting a secure job is better than waiting for a more satisfying job. I have mentioned some reasons, points, and my experience to defend my idea below.
First, nowadays, there are many universities to enter and educate. Also, there are many majors and specializations to pursue and learn. The world population is getting larger while many people have expertise in the same thing. As a result, the job positions fill very soon, and sometimes we do not have many choices to take. Therefore, if we could find a secure job, we should not hesitate in taking it. For example, after graduation from university, I and my friend started to look for finding a job. Almost after three months, we found a job, and the job had two positions available. That job was not my favorite, but its conditions were good enough so, I took it. In contrast, my friend preferred to look more to find a better job, but she could not. In the end, She had to take a job with a low condition.
Second, if we wait for a satisfying job, there is no guaranty that the job will also be secure. I mean, there might be a possibility to get fired from that job after a while. For example, my brother one month after graduation found a job that he loved. Everything was alright, but all of a sudden, he got fired from his job. They told him that they could not support many employees anymore.
To sum up, according to what I mentioned, I think if we have an opportunity to get a secure job, we must take it soon.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, so, therefore, while, for example, i mean, i think, in contrast, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1367.0 1977.66487455 69% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.33968253968 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55020439456 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514285714286 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.6254936244 48.9658058833 40% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 68.35 100.406767564 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.75 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342540504824 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111235537772 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0812768154596 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229924610001 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640149138648 0.0645574589148 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.9 11.7677419355 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.6 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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