Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to grow up in the countryside than in a large city. Use specific reasons and examples to develop your essay.
It is critically for our society to contribute to the development and wellbeing of the young people regardless the place they come from. In my opinion, a large city can provide children with a better environment and opportunities. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, having access to a developed city infrastructure, museums, schools and theater can contribute to the personal growth of each individual. In addition, being surrounded by people with similar mindset, that mainly focuses on their education is a powerful tool in order to achieve great results later on in life. Moreover, a big city has to offer a lot of entertainment and access to sport clubs where children can develop their skills and aptitudes. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. Ten years ago, my mother decided to show me the place where she grew up, because she fought, I will be very happy to experience the lifestyle in countryside. Contrary to her expectations, I started to feel very sad because it was the first time when I realized how boring it can be without access to modern technology. In fact, I had no friends there and the only thing I could do was to relax in the garden all the day long and read old books. I missed very much my friends, my drawing classes and my volleyball team. Based on this experience I acknowledged how lucky I was to be able to live in a big city with a lot of movement and interesting events.
Secondly, in a big city, children are more likely to have access to qualitative education which is very important for a developed community. Consequently, in a small village usually there is no competition because of the reduced number of people. Furthermore, in rural areas children tend to get in touch with people of the same culture, whereas in major cities the concept of globalization and cultural exchange is more popular. For instance, my cousin grew up in a very small city and she barely could attend her classes at school because of lack of public transport. It was very hard for her to wake up every day, very early in the morning to catch the school bus that arrived at her station only twice a day. We are the same age and we were supposed to study the same basic things at school, but her level of English was way behind from mine. As a result, she could not apply for one-year scholarship to study abroad in England at her dream university. This example demonstrates how important is to be able to get valuable education In order to succeed in life.
In conclusion I am of the opinion that it is better for children to live in a big and modern city than in a poor and rural area. This is because in this way they can have access to a variety of academic and cultural facilities and because they have diverse and cosmopolitan populations.
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Suggestion:
... education In order to succeed in life. In conclusion I am of the opinion that i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, whereas, as to, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2345.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59803921569 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77052717694 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494117647059 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.9073863166 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.590909091 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1818181818 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90909090909 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169881858807 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0526847487488 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534514088868 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123931367402 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0616813897927 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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